|Reviews for The Cole Turns To Ash|
| Guest chapter 31 . 10/8
That final chapter tore me to pieces. Thank you.
| sage1111 chapter 31 . 3/17
Hm, i kind of feel like cole should have killed someone at one point. I mean, he would tottaly be right for it. And im kind of disapointed that he didnt get to blackmail anybody with those videos :( but this story is awesome nontheless i like cole and vincent, they would be my favorite characters. And while you didnt really have an actual plot, you pulled off an actual story just by having cool characters :) great job, im off tp read your other works now!
| Guest chapter 30 . 1/18
The first few chapters of your story are really good, but I feel like you lost the plot pretty early on. I feel like by this point your characters got kind of muddled. Your humour is still good, but I think it could be better if the characters were more distinct.
| Ydtxhgfcjgf chapter 6 . 9/29/2016
Literally what the fuck is wrong with you you sick bitch lmfao the fuck you writing about? Goddamn are you sick you need to go to mf church and confess yourself because you a nasty cunt
| vh132 chapter 31 . 7/6/2016
Thank you for the story ! It was so funny :) !
| Authoriloveyou chapter 18 . 4/16/2016
I went to a catholic school... No hot teachers. *sigh*
Lots of hypocrite teachers tho.
| MalexisSwerve chapter 13 . 5/15/2015
So, let me get this straight.
Cole says he cannot trust Ashton
Ashton asks why
Cole says he's a whore
Ashton jumps Cole
Ashton punches Cole
Ashton kisses Cole
Cole breaks Ashton's wrist
Ashton scratches Cole
Ashton gives Cole a blowjob
Cole then punches Ashton
Cole runs away.
Bipolar much? XD
| brandedinferno chapter 7 . 3/19/2015
I love this so much. It's really good, and all the characters are like...on fleek. Ew I hate that word. Nevermind.
| Everfew chapter 4 . 2/20/2015
Huh. Some grammar troubles, but this still seems pretty good.
| tyves986 chapter 31 . 11/14/2014
Okay, I am kind of pissed I spent all night reading this story...ugh. I didn't sleep and I blame the author. Well mostly I hate Cole, is it weird to hate the main character and the main point of view. He is such a kid. Than I remember he is a kid. It all clicks into place, though I hate to ever say I was ever that irrational and emotionally stunted as him.
Well first, I was really not rooting for anyone here (I kind of wanted Cole to end up miserable and alone), until this last chapter. Though, it wasn't a huge surprise that Ashton had his own issues (especially the hostility with Trent was more than, your banging the guy I want to bang hostility).
The church camp chapter was umm...terribly boring. To much of Cole complaining and whining (also to much doing things? and the things they were doing were terribly uninteresting for me). While I enjoy reading it (or I would have never gotten that far), I thought it was excessive even from him. I have to admit I skipped parts of it.
I also felt Adam got put "on the bus" so to speak. I am not even sure where the cute little freshman went.
I realize you were probably planning on writing a sequel thing, but since you didn't. I felt that the whole Vincent might be his cousin thing, was something I really wanted to see in this story. It made Cole's character extremely unlikable. I say that in all seriousness because for some reason I can excuse the rest of his douchiness with his personality. However, I am not sure but it didn't seem to fit he didn't say anything, even though he worked up the balls to tell Dawson not to kill himself. I rate we might be related and my aunt might be your mother the same as talks of "hey don't kill yourself buddy" as important stuff you should grow balls for to talk about. I also felt it was not like him to do so. By the way, I laughed so hard at the scene where Cole is talking to Dawson about him thinking about suicide, and I know it was inappropriate, but I could see this conversation in my head, it was brilliant.
Weird ending by the way? I am not sure how you could have introduced Ashton's past without doing so, but yeah...still seems kind of off to me. I did find it quite satisfying knowing what his issues were and his point of view. I actually kind of theorized that it was Cole that was saved in the fire, when Cole first talked about it. I kind of though it was Adam after that, than I thought it might have been Dominic (thus the reason for his weird obsessiveness/possessiveness), than I thought hey it might be some random little kid.
So many examples of bad parents or guardians. It's kind of hilarious in the dark humor sort of way.
| It chapter 1 . 7/24/2014
As of the first chapter I have to say I'm intrigued. Great start!
Why am I reviewing so early? I gotta ask. Naked Pinguin Fetus For Pope? This sounds like a story.
| Scented-Candle chapter 31 . 7/15/2014
Too lazy to log in today. Just saying this up front, I almost never read because I always strip stories down to their bones and rearrange everything. Okay, that sounded morbid, but basically if you feel like I'm hating, I'm not. My nickname in my English class is 'the Editor'.
When I first started reading, I loved this story. Your sense of humour is brilliant. It's very rare for me to laugh out loud while reading a story, but you managed to make me laugh quite frequently while reading this.
Humour is not the most important part of a story, though. Sometimes it seemed as if you were trying to squeeze a laugh out of a reader, when the comical tone seemed out of place based on what was going on plot-wise. Speaking of the plot, my expectations of a developed storyline are never too high for a romance novel. This particular plot was better than most for sure, but just... okay over all. That being said, I haven't read the sequel you menioned :).
About the characters, Cole was a weak protagonist. I felt as if he became just a total whore by the end. Not gonna lie, I skipped chapter 29, I think, because his switching between guys and all that in-caps yelling made me being said, I enjoyed your style of narration and Cole's personality. And it's extremely unrealistic to have nearly every character be gay. I wish this many people were gay in real life. But in a Catholic environment, what are the chances that even the Principal is gay and a borderline pedophile? My friend goes to the local Catholic school and attends anti-gay classes as curriculum, much to her chagrin.
Over all, I did enjoy reading this. My favourite part was Vincent. Just... everything Vincent. I'll have to check out more of your work. If you ever need a volunteer editor/ French-Japanese translator, I'm your girl. Keep writing!
| Gergenia chapter 31 . 5/4/2014
When will you post the sequeal? This story's so fucked up and sweet and amazing and basically the most unique story I have ever read . Wow, I just can't hate this . It's like how nobody can hate peanut butter and jelly . This is peanut butter and jelly in cake form, different from the usual sandwich form , but when someone trys it , they immediately fall in love with it. And the person that fell in love with this cake is me. And I want more cake. Cause I love this cake . And it's the best freaking cake I have ever and will ever have.
| way of life chapter 1 . 4/25/2014
Pretty hilarious when you get past the depressing emo type personality. You did your character justice with what you described him in the summary.
Though Cole sounded a bit too ... i don't know... angsty? He was way to afraid of germs, it was like he almost had a phobia, and the first paragraph about fruit orgy was a bit too much, but a good introduction.
He also seemed overly concerned about AIDS and what not.
A good chapter overall, conveys personality of both Cole and Ashton very clearly.
| LesBeatles chapter 31 . 4/20/2014
Okay. I love this story. So much. There were parts that made me laugh my ass off and parts that were just SO FUCKING PERFECTLY AWESOME that I couldn't even think of a better way things could have turned out. Seriously. Normally my mind sidetracks during stories because it's like "DUDE. WHY THE FUCK? DID... UGH. NO."
And then I have to exit out and it's just REALLY REALLY rare that this doesn't happen with a story. And your story was totally awesome!
... before the ending chapters.
The last few chapters seemed to be... pure crack. It's more my personal preference that I don't like crack a whole lot, but I just... didn't like the way things played out.
You went through a lot of details and crack-like scenes that weren't very... interesting. And your humor TOTALLY seemed to change. It's like you, as a writer, took a hiatus and came back as a TOTALLY different person. I could like... feel that in your writing, if that makes sense.
Don't get me wrong, there were still some good scenes, but it feels like you wrote some scenes just to put in some humor in there. Like, there was no point to them? If that makes sense. It makes a reader lose interest very quickly, especially if the beginning and ending writing styles are very inconsistent.
Your readers were hooked on your original writing style! They liked the drama, the lust, the sex, the jealousy, rage, etc. Your story was hilarious, but it was a TAME humor. Like... you didn't go overboard with it. I feel like that's what you did in the end. You kinda... lost track of the plot, and everything just got very crazy and scattered and all over the place.
I'm still favoriting this story because it's the best I've read in SUCH a long while. You ARE an amazing writer, I feel like you just kinda got lost partway through the story, or lost interest, or changed in some way, or something. It just wasn't the same story anymore. I felt the need to point that out so you could be more aware of it next time. Like... if I didn't think you had a serious talent for writing, then I wouldn't even bother, so I guess take this critique as a compliment, lol. I don't usually review unless a story blows my mind, so yeah.