Omfg! I love this stoy

I swear every fucking min I was fucking laughing my ass off

shit girl like you think just like menim serious well

me and Cole are just alike too

fuck tho that was awsum

an I loved the action in it too

ugh I had so many nosbleds lol

but fucking shit fucking princple he's a creep

but that's was the best sex scenes every hehehe

Absolutly loved it...Cole is a bitch though...but still i loved it...

Oh my god. Wait, that's like the most used phrase in this fic. Along with fuck. And Jesus Fucking Christ. And... OH WHO KNOWS? I am so glad I am not a Christian or anything, cause that would have spoiled the pure AWESOMENESS of this piece of work. Yes. Piece of work... Art. Whatever. I can't tell you how bad I crossed my fingers in hopes that Ashton gets Cole... But the title suggested it, and now my fingers are all one, singular mess. Anyhows! OHMIGAWD! You must have been very emo and lost something important to you and heard your life is over and be mad at Rachizzle for flaming you when writing this chapter... IT WAS SO AMAZINGLY SAD. The sweetest - Cole being the boy that Ashton saved. So MUCH Aw-nage. Yes, the opposite of pwnage. So I listened to Bjork's 'Post' album, and just when Cole struggles to tell Ashton he loves him, Bjork starts singing 'All is Full of Love'. I was like... WTF? Then again, I blame my weed smoking friend who gave me the music. Like, I've wasted three nights of my life reading this, and I won't ever ever ever ever regret it! Oh Oh Oh Oh! Sequel question... WHEN? And if you don't reply to this... YOU BROKE YOUR PROMISE! *gasps* *winks* :D btw, Cole is such a slut. Erheart should die while his wife suffocates him with her vagina. Ahem... oops. I'm dragging on... But... I don't wanna say goodbye to this fic. I NEED THAT SEQUEL! But if it's about Trent... GR! Putain de Merde!

Madder than a sack of cats. Srsly. Mind you, I guess the username gives a good idea of what to expect. Highly enjoyable gigantic hunk 'o' story, read it two or three days, really enjoyed. The insanity, it amuses us. Rock on :) x

Wow. This story is amazing!

I got into this story because I heard some other fictionpress raving about and I thought I have to check it out. And man! You make slash hot! I used to never read it but there a few stories I like on here that have slash, for some reason the romance is normally more passionate and hot, and yours is by far one of the best!

I'm not sure of you even come on any more but this is an piece of writing!

I loved the little bit with scripts... "OH, JESUS CHRIST!" I was giggling for ages; I would've laughed but it's like 2 a.m and I don't want everyone to think I'm mad!

I love love love Cole, he is a little emo-y kid and I'm quite loving Ashton too. Actually I love everyone... including you. Because you are amazing.

Now, I've got me a story to finish!

xx

I cannot believe I actually read all of that...

and.. I mean, through out the whole story I have been literally talking to myself out loud about how much I really love your story and how I have so much wonderful shit to tell you!

But .. now that I finished, all I can say is.. can I worship you? You are my new God and I will love you forever. In a non creepy stalker kind of way.

Cole.. reminds me of me..

Ashton.. is so cute..

I love this story, so much. I will now ask for permission to print it and to keep my own copy of it by my bed at all times!

Lovely! Oh! I actually read this. Without my ADD driving me nuts. So you. You really are God.

How lovely! No, really, I love this, it's good writing and very entertaining!

Congrats, you're the first person on this whole site who was able to keep my attention for longer than the five minutes it took me to read this. xD

that's pretty good considering I'm terribly ADD. I love this, I definitely will be reading the rest!

Oh my goodness. I just made the connection...

Is the title like pokemon?

MM?

The Cole turns to Ash. (Meaning the person.)

The World turns to Ash. (Meaning the guy from pokemon)

My god, I love this story! I think Cole is hiarious...I just have a thing for sarcasm and so far Cole's using it like a pro! And did I laugh with the 'F*CKING C*NT' in the previous chapter! Just picturing the scene. Wonderful work so far! Thanks for sharing it!

I AM SO EXCITED ABOUT THIS SEQUEL

LIKE OMGOMGOMG

Anyway. Back to coherence.

I truly enjoyed this story. I mean, holy motherfucking crap. I don't even know where to begin. Just, beginning with the honest characterization of Cole to the awesome, oh so fucking hot, sex scenes with Erheart. Yes, Erheart sex scenes were my favorites. They were literally the best. God.

I'm not even sure how to explain how much I enjoyed this. It was pretty crack-y, but I enjoy stories with crack in it.

The excess cursing and Jesus-fucking (what?) really had me. Also, Cole had me at "I hate apples." Because I love apples. I eat like crapload everyday. You made my life worth living for. And if the sequel is not uploaded, then I might as well go out, tack myself to a tree, and call it suicide. Really. So this means that the sequel needs to happen pronto.

Guh. Drooling about Erheart and his pedophile tendencies. Something must be wrong with me.

Thank you for writing this. Oh MY GOD, thank you for fucking writing.

OMG OMG OMG

I LAUGHED SO HARD AT THIS CHAPTER. I SWEAR.

I don't even know how to describe the laughter I am experiencing right now at this chapter. It's incredible. Incredible.

Hello Naked Penguin Fetus For Pope (Oh damn, I think you’re the only one with that username on the Internet),

Okay then, I’ve read your story “The Cole Turns To Ash” and as I always do, I leave a review. I’ve got a lot on my hands for the moment, so it’s always nice to take a break and read a fanfiction story on FFN or a fiction like this on FP. I can write myself pretty much all the time since I use my laptop in school, but I haven’t felt all that motivated lately, and you know what; to make things better I’m not even READING stories of the same category as the stories I write. Oh, and I write Fanfiction stories, so; I read Harry Potter stories, and then I write Naruto stories, I’m just weird sometimes . . . well . . . the majority of the time I’m (in)sane. Great. As I said, I’ve got a lot to do for the moment, so I break from that with FP reading is great.

It’s always like a wake-up call to find something that makes you frown and think twice, so stories with one of the genres being Drama is awesome – even though in a sad way – their past and what happened then etc.. Since I’m leaving a review, I’ve got to tell you about the things I liked, didn’t like that much and then of course, I’ve got to leave some constructive criticism. I’ve got some questions and wonderings as well, and I hope you’re going to read this review and answer the questions. If you don’t have the time to, it’s acceptable, but I’d appreciate it. Even though there are a lot of matters I’d like to discuss, I’ll only bring up a few under each headline. I hope you’re fine with that, or else, I’d leave a review this long for EACH AND EVERY CHAPTER, and that’s something I really don’t have the time to do, so yeah . . .

POSITIVE:

(I write this all the time, but whatever . . . this is one of the main reasons for me actually reading a story to begin with) The beginning of the story was good. It wasn’t like this; they met, put rabbits to shame and BOM! They live happily ever after. You had an introduction, and that’s something most people forget about. From my point of view, I kind of like the plot in general actually. It’s a little, little, little different from other stories – Cole being such a pessimist and all that. He kind of DID get on my nerves from time to time, though, it was his persona so it’s understandable.

I liked the title very much, and it fit the story perfectly. “Cole” and “Ash”, it’s quite ingenious really, and my friend’s name is Ash . . . sweet . . .

The story was long, complex and had a very good plot. The entire story happened during a year-ish I believe, so you didn’t rush things, but you also made sure that things were going too slow. I like that with you, and it’s a rare quality with the authors whose work I’ve read so far. I hope to come across authors like you in the future.

You’re great with grammar, spelling, capitalization, as well as with the details, descriptions, emotions and realistic writing.

NEGATIVE:

Ty~ypos. Don’t you love them? Just like you love a pain in the arse . . . bet Cole would like it though, if a certain Ashton is involved. Hmm. I can understand why typos appear though – for it to be flawless and contain no mistakes whatsoever is quite inevitable, though, that doesn’t matter – I like it when there are some mistakes. It shows me that this person likes to write, for fun, and is not a perfectionist who writes for the publicity.

It was too short of a story. Period. Lawl.

To be more serious then. There were sex every-fucking-where, and at first I was like; “Okay, they have sex, yes, great, let’s move on.” And then Cole started to have sex with the principle and it just escalated. It was probably the only bad thing about the story – that’s something out of importance, to me at least. I write sex in stories too, but too much it too much you know. In the future stories you can lessen it a bit. Cheers.

QUESTIONS & WONDERINGS:

a) How did you come up with this plot? Did you get your inspiration from an event in real life; did you read a story to get some inspiration, or what happened? I know that this may look like a strange question, but I’d like to know as a growing author, as well as a reader of this story. I want to know how you thought. Stalker waning i.e.

b) You know if we’ll see more of you in the future, or have you given up on FP writing? I can see the potential of becoming a potent author so don’t let your talents get wasted. Doesn’t matter if it’s fiction writing or not, oh bloody— write a book or whatever. You sure do have some talents.

That’s all I’ve got to say, and I’ve just very glad that you’ve written this story. I’ve said it once before, but really; this is a good story but some parts were just weird. Btw, I’m too lazy (YES! I am lazy; I think we agree on that, hmm?) to go back and look for errors in this reviews – even though I left a certain negative comment about this . . . damn . . . – so you’ll just have to bear with me today. I’ve got school tomorrow, so it’s sleep that’s next on my list of things to do. Nighty, nighty. Dream. Live. Read. Write. Eat. All for fiction. Cheers.

Huggles,

Mi

Haha ok so I have to tell you that I think Cole is about the funniest freaking character I've ever read. Seriously. I kept laughing really hard and my roomate would look at me like wtf. But hey. What can you do?

Anyway. Just wanted to say kudos cuz this story was highly entertaining. :)

I actually, err, took the liberty of making that Adam/Ian scene useful, by, um, making it a pleasurable experience for me, if you know what I mean XD Nice job.

I loved your story! Like I've said before I laughed so hard during it. When I've had people around or something they look at me like "what the fuck are you reading" teehee but fuck them I just couldn't help but laugh. I can't wait to read more stuff from you!

~ShayJ~