|Reviews for Eyes|
| and calliope said chapter 1 . 12/29/2006
Intriguing concept, excellent starting line. It gets a little messy further on, though:
"that's what you said to me
the night you walked out
on me What dose mean?"
I'd take the second "on me" out because it's a bit repetitive and make "What dose mean?" its own line. I think you meant "what does it mean" - probably a typo.