Definitly an intriging plot. Is the story framed out already? Or are you writing on the fly?

Love your origonals just as much as your fanfiction!

Please write more soon?

I love the story, can't wait for the rest!

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I'm glad you decided to continue this. One mistake I noticed was that you wrote Alfa, it's supposed to be Alpha. Unless, of course there's a reason why you did, if so ignore that. Iyadar's a great character, the whole conflict between domestication and wild life fascinates me. Werewolves are always fun hehehe. Zaros' submissiveness and hugeness makes me chuckle. Damon is my favorite though. He sees the challenge in Iyadar and who can ignore a challenge like taming a shewolf. Totally love the setting: a place ruled by a sadistic warlord but also a place where women are freer than anywhere else. I really enjoy this. Now, excuse me while I go and picture Iyadar in her new collar ... he he he...

I like this story a LOT! Great setting, interesting characters and snappy dialogue tinged with a little sarcasm. Just my cup of tea.

Hope you update this soon, I think I might be hooked.

I hate Damon i can't stand him he makes me sick the way he uses women, I hope Iyadar end's up with Zaros b/c he seems to care more for her. And i hope in the end Iyadar breaks Damon's heart and runs off with Zaros. PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON I FIND THE PLOT INTERESTING.

I think this is good. I love that you write in a descriptive way and balance the dialogue and such. Unfortunately, for many on this site, they haven't quite balanced this trait :]I cant wait for the next chapter :]

You're back! I was waiting on this one but alas, it didn't come...until now that is! Trust me, I know what it's like to become disenchanted with a story or what it feels like to have less reviews that you hope for but I have to say, this is a great story. I've already praised it for its uniqueness and I must say, your attention to detail is amazing. You can find many plot holes in stories, particularly broad ones such as this, I notice it in my own writing a lot of times but you seem to pick up everything. The naturallness of Iyadar's reaction to Zaros and his pick of positioning as Beta, makes for a very believable submission to Damon. And of course, the jewels of the collar, is totally in keeping with Damon's flamboyant attitude and Iyadar's completely minimalistic one. Keep this up and please update!

Here we go again with the amazingly vibrant prose, painting a rather complete and beautiful picture that has all the lucentness of a dream, but with just enough harshness to provide a firm edge of realism. The unspoken relationship between Damon and Zaros is incredibly intresting to try and figure out through their slight reverberations and gentle pokes toward inference. I have to actually think to put together their feelings toward each other and toward the world around them. You did a great job of inserting old world speech as well such as using "centre" instead of center, and such flippant sterness of the times such as the line "And having the army of Hell Gaite master and all arrive on one’s doorstep in the dead of winter inclined one too give back one lowly daughter." Taken altogether, a great chapter that moved the story forward and offered more insight into the special characters that set this story completely on the other side of the spectrum for boring medieval fantasy, amazing job, keep it up and UPDATE SOON!

Well, first things first, you definitely have a talent for fantasy style writing with the lush backgrounds and traditional scapes you provide, that being said it's incredibly interesting and downright bold to deviate from this tradition with a homosexual hero and to suggest a threesome! Ludicrous! That's another point I'd like to comment on, I never ever read m/m or f/f fiction just because that's not my orientation so this is my first and from your style I'm guessing its gonna be a graphic ride but I'll stick with it for a few reasons, one, I like to finish what I start, two, I love your style, and three, WEREWOLVES! I have read Bitten and every other book Kelley Armstrong has ever written, she's my damn hero! Keep this up, I'm extremely interested to see where it goes and how the plot develops with three such unorthodox main characters, it has a chance to be really different and unique so I'll leave you with the traditional reviewers parting, UPDATE SOON!

you do a fine job of painting the image of another world. Your characters and descriptions are both original and intriguing please keep writing.