Reviews for 17
icanhasusername chapter 1 . 12/4/2010
Random thought...

Why the placement of "transparent-clear"? Or was it a "grammatical error"?
callmebrighteyes chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
"This is something/This is a call to arms/This is my final stop."

Breath-taking. I adored this.

The way you changed styles with the stanzas gave the entire thing a sense of time. You aged it, and it seemed(to me) like time had pasted. This was beautiful.
running-in-the-rain chapter 1 . 9/10/2009
This would make an amazing song.

Was that what you had in mind?

While I read I kept trying to conjure a tune,

but I was unsure as to the type of song it would be.
TehDoomWriter chapter 1 . 1/12/2007
Now, THIS is what I'm talking about. (Really great work, I like the repetition, the single separation of the "Oh...") Fav.
the-foresight chapter 1 . 12/31/2006
Great stuff, wonderful metaphor with the ocean. You brought loads of layers to the theme but still kept you message clear. Good work!