This isn't a bad story. I have a slight problem with an ex brother and sister falling in love and having sex but once you get past that, it's a alright story. Not my favorite of yours but it was still alright. And i don't mean this weirdly or meanly but i think that a brother and a sister even if they were step related and not by blood falling in love and having sex is really disgusting. i guess it wouldn't be bad but i have a step brother adn the thought of him toughing me is disgusting so maybe it is just me. also i noticed that a lot of your stories have a lot of sex in them. um i think that since you said that you wanted to break away from the same pattern, a story without swearing adn sex would probably be the best place to start. most things fall into place if you set up the story. not that i don't like romance, it is the majority of what i right and is what i publish on this site, i'm just saying that it was a lot to handle. that's all.

I like this one as well. The first sentance is a little repetative but the rest of it isn't bad. You write really long chapters. i think they are long and i read pretty quickly. I like this, it says a lot about human nature and what happens when parents divorce or one dies and stuff. it says a lot. it mentions the heartbreak and stuff like that. it is really well written.

Great start to the story. I hope you continue

Another Good Chapter. Can't wait til you post the next installment! Keep up the Fantastic work.

three things:

one. Ellie took her eyes off the road and looked out her window. "Ooh, look a cat!" I totally love you for that. Whether intentional or not - i love you and thankyou VERY much for doing that.

two. Wow..Jeff Klein total sick, perverted bastard. We should call women's rights on him. See how big he is after he's been beaten by 300 angry femenists!

three. aw they're finally together - too cute. and WOW! gettin' steamy in the bathroom, and i'm not just referring to the hot water *wink wink*

haha, good chapter - as always!

can't wait for more

izzie

one word:

FINALLY!

i mean - how long does one have to wait for them to get together!

lol, good chapter!

izzie

Man oh man could this get any better? Your story just keeps getting better and better can't wait til next week to read the next installment! Thanks for yet another good chapter!

aww how cute

Ben & Ellie.

i like where the story is headed.

and im curious as to how it'll turn out.

good story so far

izzie

I really like this story. You are doing a good job with it and i can't wait to see where it goes.