I can see why you wanted to revive this story! The way you give your characters personality is actually amazing and I believe that you can definitely have this be an extremely well know story, it already is in my book.(P.S i read this a little bit before I joined a community but I ended up liking it more now )

Hi, at first I was against reading this, because adventure stories aren't really my favorite genres to read, but this first chapter changed my mind. I promise to read the rest when I have time. Arkin is so cute, he's the sole reason why I changed my mind for this story. People are very reluctant to write a story starring kids, frankly.

Anyway, great start, but I think the characters need to be introduced more. For example, when you described Annysa (you didn't even say her name when you first described her), why was she attractive? C'mon, you can say it... She has large breasts, doesn't she? It's alright to write stuff like that. I usually write at least five sentences for each paragraph and seven when it comes to describing characters, that way, each character is memorable.

Towards the end, I can tell you rushed a little. It's okay, because I do it too when we're anxious to get it done and updated for our readers, but a little spellcheck from Word would have helped out. For example, during one of the characters speaking, you wrote coz, when it should have been 'cause. While accents are important in a character's speeach, and the only way to get around the grammar rules, spelling is a must at all times.

Other than that, the first chapter is pretty well-written and I can't wait to see how much trouble Arkin gets himself into.

Wow that was a lot of characters coming up for one chapter. BUT! They were very well introduced. :)

The plot is nice. I thought it was unexpected that Arkin would head out like that after all that Fangrin told him, but it was nice. It shows how determined he was. I lik characters like that.

Ther were a few grammar mistakes here and there, but overall it was good.

Finally an update. Man, you sure made us wait. But it was worth it. The fight between Eldos and Karan was nicely done and the teaser for Arkin vs. Zartan made me anxious about the next battle. It should be cool.

The only nitpick I have so far is that Philia, who I'm guessing is gonna join Arkin, seems relatively useless right now; a situation I hope will change in the near future.

Until then: keep up the great work!

Would you consider this an alternate universe, or the usual fantasy world where everything is done with good old fashion stuff?

I kinda like this story, it seems to be heading in the right direction right now.

On a side note, I always thought Earth absorbed Lightning?

An interesting chapter indeed. I like the fact that we got an inside on Arkin and Philia. Sudden appearance of Eldos seemed a bit out of the blue, but if you say it was planned since the beginning, I'll believe you.

Overall it was a good chapter and I can't wait to read more of it. Update soon.

Great that I helped start the ball going again. Nothing's better than feeling you've contributed, eh? _

I just hope that Eldos won't go the route of many "old mentor" characters, teaching all they know and then dying since the story has no use for them. I want to see an old badass like... like Garp or something!

Pretty cool chapter, looks like they've got some exciting moments ahead of them!

I liked your title pages. They're nicely done.

Moving on: this arc is evolving rather nicely, granted Arkin had an easy (though spectacular) win. Now it's time for Zartan and Karan. I wonder how you're gonna play that out.

Not much to nitpick here, so either it's good, or you're making the same mistakes I am XD

Overall: great job and good luck with future chapters.

Finally, an update! Took you long enough XD

But it was worth the wait. While the battle was rather one-sided, it was still quite spectacular and interesting. And now the real challenge will come along, with Zartan showing up. Can't wait for that encounter.

I love what you're doing with this story, so don't make us wait this long for chapter 5!

Great job!

I'm trying to remember what the story was about, since it was a while before an update...:D. Very good fight scenes - one thing that you could improve is the grammer. Spelling, sentence structure, and all of that. Your verbs also, are kind of bungled. By that, I mean the tenses, like "It took him a moment to swallow his pride and only then did he spoke again" 'Spoke' should have been 'speak'.

Other than that, a good chapter. I'll have to go back, and read from the beginning, so I know what exactly is going on...lol.

The action did not disappoint, it was exciting and fast paced!

I really like Shang's idea of the covers, and its cool to see them here to...The pieces seem to be falling into place for a grand adventure to unfold...I like how you're setting things up, its got me hooked to see what happens next!

(Sorry for all the... its a bad habit I've picked up)

Ah, well, things are heating up. I'd wish you would hit the "enter" button and seperate paragraphs whenever someone else speaks, however.

The usual shonen story is unfolding so far, with Arkin besting a bunch of rowdy-yet-underpowered villains and he must now worry about the higher-ups. The execution of these next few chapters is important, to see if it can seperate itself from the horde as something unique.

I'd advise going on TV Tropes and looking around, getting a feel for various storytelling elements and how to use them in this story. It certainly helps.

Pretty damn interesting chappie you have here. I'm impress on the contraction between Arkin when he was a boy and when he's a teenager. They sure grow up fast, don't they? The contents in the chapter is good, plot is running smoothly without falling out of focus. Arkin's personality fits the "Soon-to-be-the-best" adventure hunter. Very determined and ambition, and at the end, sounds cool and badass.

Further notice, I still disagree with other reviewers and how they can compare THIS story to ONE PIECE. I can find a lot of reason for them to mention that anime and manga, but only one reason stands out more than the others. One Piece is currently popular during this time to Americans and has been watched by many, so of course if people not diverse in anime, then they will make reference to the most popular current anime airring. There is tones of animes, mangas, stories both published and unpublished that had some sort of an idea that includes somebody wanting to do something, meeting somebody that is famous for it, and then being determined to be more famous. This concept is widely used and this story shouldn't be exploited like that.

I find this story highly original in all aspects and have endless possibilities on what's going to happen later chapters. I can not rant enough how this story had made any direction reference to One Piece and recommend that everyone that said that it sounds like One-Piece needs to watch more animes or read more mangas that involves a similar concept.

I am sorry for putting all that in a review but it annoys me when I read reviews that makes reference to one of the current animes showing. I am sorry Zeek for all this but I like your story very much and deserve all the credit for this original piece.

Whatever you do, do not stop writing this story. Getting reviews isn't easy if you just come here to post stories. You have to get around, review other people work to get reviews back. That is the fastest and most efficient way to get reviews, even if you have a story worthy of being publish. And yes, I could see this story being published one day if you don't give up and continue till you reach your goal and then you start another goal. Writing and more writing helps you get more experience as a writer and also, reading other works to see what they do. This is your story and you should write it your own way. Just make sure that you do the best as you can to edit your work or have a friend help you with it.

That is all. Thank you for a wonderful story.

Nice addition and conclusion to your introductory to this masterpiece of yours. The plot flowed so fluidly and gracefully that even without heavy descriptions, everything is there. And another thing, I don't like your reviews saying that this reminds them of One Piece when One Piece is totally different and Luffy wants to be the king of the pirates. Like I said on the other chapter, it seems that your inspiration originates from Beet, and a obvious hint is your name Zeek. This story is completely original, is just that us readers can use other mangas and animes to better understand each others stories.

With that all said and done, the only thing left is talk about your writing. Overall, it's good, I understood it without worries for errors. However, I do highly suggest a beta reader or a friend (Offline or online) to help you edit your stories since English isn't your first lanaguage. (Makes me wonder what is). My first language isn't English also, however, it soon became my only language. (Mother from Philippines and speaks her own village's language) So yeah, anyways, good luck with this story and I shall continue on!