|Reviews for Fighting Perfection|
| C.F.Adams chapter 2 . 8/15/2007
Hey, it's a great story but I got lost in the second chapter where Abbie was talking to Nate and the next thing I know she was taking a bath. I was looking for something to fill the gap. Watch the spelling; such as diffing. I think you were trying to spell digging. More that once you spelled that "hath" And Abbie is spelled with a "Y" not "ie"
I hope you write more to this Fighting perfection.
| C.Sabbadin chapter 1 . 6/10/2007
I think you should have separated some of the paragraphs into smaller ones.
Also you start off talking about perfection embodied in three girls, and then you tear off on a ramble about Abbie's friend being in a coma. Though i may be wrong this seemed totally unneccessary.
The idea is good but you should focus on how their perfection effects their lives.
| Kelaia chapter 1 . 1/11/2007
I like the idea of this story, and again it is well written. Just watch out for the occasional spelling/grammar mistake [last line - diffing, should it be digging?]. Looking forward to your next update!