Reviews for L as in TRAIN
WitchGhost chapter 16 . 1/27/2007
A good chapter! I suck at drawing so I won't be too much help in that dipartment, but good luck with finding an artist I have no artistic friends so I probabely won't have much luck either.
Kizuna chapter 16 . 1/27/2007
I liked the chappy!_ Especially the last scene when Luke read that paper, and what Lorren said when he came in!_~
bR0k3N chapter 16 . 1/27/2007
(nerdy voice) I can't wait for the next chapter! heehee
bR0k3N chapter 15 . 1/27/2007
damn that nosy bitchy teacher!
bR0k3N chapter 14 . 1/27/2007
juicy

and congrats!
bR0k3N chapter 13 . 1/27/2007
hehee I love this chapter.
NekoRinChan chapter 16 . 1/26/2007
Ah! What is Luke gonna say? _ -Spazzes.- I must read more. (( I have this strong urge to read for some reason and.. umigawd. )) T.T Suspense.. ebil ebil suspense.

*Cough* Hokay, I like your idea for the cover. o.o I'd try to draw it... but I would not be able to. D: Imma try to think of something. Mebe I should go back and skim over Cri de Coeur, refresh mah memory, mebe get some inspiration. Wow, nine months? It's been that long? :O Haha, yeah. You could've had a baby by now. xD But wow.. nine months. Now off I go to refresh mah mind! (( And hopefully think of an idea for a cover. ))
Globular chapter 15 . 1/25/2007
I was trying to be really regular about reviewing (and lagging behind a bit) but this time, it was all fictionpress's fault. Really.

Congradulations on getting your story published. That is really awesome and I think you deserve it for being one of the better writers on fictionpress (likeable characters and plots, grammar and spelling in order). I'll read the first three chapters that you have up and look around for the story when it gets published ]

Did Lorren ever get his diary back? When he kisses that man, I felt that it was a very powerful scene. Instead of having either Luke or Lorren react in a cliched manner to the harrassment, you revealed a different aspect of Lorren's personality. Really cool.

When they start hitting on each other in Spanish, that was really sexy. I never considered Spanish a sexy language (always thought it was either French or Russian) but damn. Maybe cuz I am reading it instead of hearing it.

The ending of chapter thirteen was such an evil cliffhanger. I was glad I could go to chapter fourteen immeadiately and make sure that Lorren didn't have an angsty past too. I don't know why but it always ticks me off when both main characters come from tortured, broken homes. I guess its my attraction to hurt-comfort fiction.

Do only the teachers know Luke has been sleeping with Lorren or do the students know to? Is Lorren officially "out" to his classmates?

Sorry about the extra-long review. I was trying to cover all the chapters I missed.
Midnights Scream chapter 15 . 1/24/2007
yeah, you're getting published and I really liked that story too. Where'd you get it published? Or more likely who published your book? I want to have some of mine published later, but I don't even know where to start. If you could tell I'd very much apprecaite. Anyway. I wonder how Lorren's going to take the new...I wonder if this will stop Luke from doing anything...hm. I still very much like it :) good job!
KitsuneLuvr chapter 15 . 1/24/2007
lol, Espanol is really funny, and smexy! I had an imported bf from spain over the summer, and I couldn't really understand anything he said, but he was SUPER smexy. For realsies. Where are you now, Javier? And don't accents just make everyone seem hotter? Pretty much, an accent brings ur score up like 3-4 points, like from a 5 to a 9 just b/c of the accent, and how hard it is to understand you. Lol, but I digress. Excellent chappy, even though it was kinda sad. I like how this little hang up isn't keeping Luke from jumping Lorren. Lol. Ur boys r so horny. I lurv them. I can't wait for the next chappy, please update soon. And if you want me to beta please feel free to send me the file. And now, off to eat dinner. Ahh, home cookin. lol
KitsuneLuvr chapter 14 . 1/24/2007
I feel really bad for just finding your story, but I luv it nonetheless! It's simply amazing! I have to go read the rest of your writing now. Also, congrats on getting published! I'd be amazingly delighted to beta for you, not that you really need it seeing how well you write! I beta all the time, so it's all good. I enjoy it. And I absolutely lurv Luke for being the 'nice guy' in this chappy and not getting it on w/ Lorren(who's name I really like for a guy!). How else will they ever have a loving, real, intimate, long lasting relationship? He is a really strong guy, cudos 2 him! And yay for Lorren, no longer a bj-virgin! Lol, this story is amazing. I can't wait to read more. My little girly insides are about to explode with excitement just thinking about the next chapter! lol. Please upodate soon! And send me that story is you want me to beta, which I really want to do! much luv
NekoRinChan chapter 15 . 1/24/2007
-Raises hand.- I wanna do cover art~! :O If I can think of something that is.. Anyway, yeah, why didn't Luke sleep with Lorren in the bedroom? And no at the probationess. Ebil teacher lady! D Augh. -Goes off to try and think of something to draw.-
just give me november chapter 15 . 1/24/2007
aahh you made me choke on my gum x_x but anyway! that's crazy. i hate nosey-ass people... especially women, it's more annoying. and especially older women. it's like, they have no life so they want to know about yours. blah. lorren's so cute. but i want to know if he's still staying with luke... hm... and spanish is lame. i take french :D
Kizuna chapter 15 . 1/24/2007
OMG! I don't like that teacher. What a bitch! Poor Luke... I hope he don't get fired... And did Lorren hear what he said? Jesus... I gotta read more, but for now there isn't more! But if you update I guess the school will block it...:-/ Stupid school... Well, I'm hoping it WON'T block it, because I NEED to know what happens now!_
Kizuna chapter 14 . 1/24/2007
I think this chapter was awesome!_~ Don't worry!_ A little sad they didn't actually do it, but they will eventually, yeah?_~ So yeah, I'm so curious to what happens, that I'm just gonna go straight to the next chappy..._
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