|Reviews for The Adventures of the Sliver Star TAOSS|
| ZeektheBard chapter 3 . 8/19/2007
Finally got a bit more time to read more of your story.
Now I must say that the general idea seems very interesting (the whole Chinese zodiac thing). Only a piece of advise (which I forgot the last time): slow down a bit. In my opinion you're rushing things too much: Kai and Yoh found that key to the treasure chest way too soon. I do wonder where this story will go and keep on reading.
So far: nice job!
| RagnarokWitness chapter 3 . 8/16/2007
Well, I read the first, three chapters, and I must say that this is pretty good. I like the idea (with China, pirates and the Zodiac), but IMO this story is moving too fast and way too conviniently for the heroes: in just three chapters they take a ship with a treasure chest that grants great power, but need the key to open it, which they find luckily soon after and those pirates, having Kai and Yoh outnumbered, they team up with them, when they could just kill them and search the ship (it's a treasure chest, it's not like it'd be hard to find on a single ship) and what's more they surprisingly run into kids that're looking for the same thing they are.
I say you really need to work on slowing it down, coz althought stretching things may bore the readers, pushing them forward forcefully is a very bad idea as well.
And it'd be a shame, coz this story is original and promising.
I'll read more soon.
| Shang chapter 1 . 8/6/2007
Finally found a bit more time to read this.
I must say that I'm pretty satifsied with what I read so far.
The idea of Kai is kinda... well, not to my liking and his story doesn't really seem tragic (all, or at least most, fathers want their sons to follow in their footsteps).
The general idea however seems pretty interesting (and since I'm a big fan of "One Piece", the sea travel idea gets a plus from me).
The one problem I did had was the fact that neither Yoh nor Kai (but in that last case it can be let go) are Chinese names. More Japanese...
But regardless it wasn't bad and I'll read the rest in a near future (hard to say when, coz I have more catching up to do, but if you'll be a bit more patient, I'll get back to this story for sure).
So far: nice job.
| Melissa Norvell chapter 14 . 6/27/2007
Pretty good story so far. I can't believe I read all those chapters in one day O_O But it had me hooked, I'll admit. The characters are very well-developed and the storyline intriguing. I can't wait until you update.
Perhaps you will take a look at my works sometime, if you've got spare time.
| ZeektheBard chapter 2 . 1/14/2007
Well, the characters themselves seem promising (even though the idea of a future boy is weird), but I don't get what Kai got so annoyed about. So his father wanted him to become a cop like him... poor baby. Besides that the story was pretty good.
I'll read the rest when I'll have some more free time.