Reviews for Prophecy of Bellrakhon
Tyanna chapter 2 . 1/10/2007
Very nice :)

My only suggestion would have been to break it up into two chapters...showing us more of of Xilhh's life before the attack. He seems to have a good relationship with his father, though we don't get to see much before the man is killed (I'm assuming :P)

btw...how would you pronouce Xilhh? ;)
Tyanna chapter 1 . 1/10/2007
Well, this is defantly a good set up for a story :P

I only had an issue with the two lines:

"The Book of Ages contained maps and spells

That, how to open the city, would tell."

They didn't flow right for me...but that might just be a personal preference :)