Haha, i love this part of the story...

Please update soon... this is to good to leave hanging for long. For the sake of all your fans that are starving for good fiction pulease...

My dear, you spelt 'spelling' as 'smalling' in your author's note.

:P

Anyways.

*blush* I'm not that good. YOU'RE the one who comes up with the plot, and writes the stuff and all. I just do the technical work, like a robot. ;p

...I'd have to say, this story is kind of freaking me out. O.o My friend was reading it (WinterFlurry) and told me to read it because Raven is a lot like me...I mean A LOT. Are you sure you aren't a stalker? oo I'm not in 11th grade (I wish), BUT! I do have blonde hair, greenish grey eyes, sarcastic, anti-social, Imma-beat-the-shit-out-of-you attitude...eek. Creepy. O.o It's a fun story, though. . I like it. The first chapter needs some major improvement on where periods and commas should go, though...and some in this chapter. There were some typos scattered here and there, but it's a good story. I wish I could write long things, but alas, I can't. Anyway, I shallst watch it if fictionpress doesn't keep hoarding emails...;

Aw...Update! ASAP! Think of ALL THE HAPPY FACES. Screw the grammer.

Great story! I liked the way you had Ravens POV and then Seans POV, that was really well written. PLease update soon.

Other than the few grammatical errors that monichi pointed out, i'd say you are off to a great start. I like how the dialogue is realistic and it is captivating, please write more!

Hey.

I think this sentence "Apparently our parents had either wanted kids really badly -something I doubted- or they had gone at it like wild rabbits after Nick -my brother- was born." is a bit oddly phrased. And there seems to be a contradiction I think? I'm not too sure about the contradiction. S :P

Oh and I think grade twelve n grade eleven etc sound a bit odd in your sentence, I think it would be better as eleventh grade and so on.

And in this certain section:" to tell her that her mother had past away when she was twelve, " you typed PAST away. Don't you mean PASSED away, like in the past tense?

And this "The girl on the other hand -Nicole I think it was, she, I knew would tell," is ALSO oddly phrased.

“Is she that mean to people.” It's supposed to be a question mark, not a full stop. Or did you mean it to be a question mark?

“Sean this is my sister Raven, Raven Sean, although you two already met.” I think there's supposed to be a comma between Raven and Sean.

“Ride the bus Raven, insulting my girlfriend isn’t going to help you any.” Ditto. Except it's bus and Raven.

Oh okay. Sorry if you think I'm too.. eh.. whiny? :P

Other than the above mistakes, I think it's pretty good. ) Continue writing, if you please.

By the way, would you by any chance want me to proof read your chapters (if there going to be any more chapters, that is.) before you post them?

Keep it up :)