Reviews for I'm Becoming Undone
His Mercy's Waiting chapter 1 . 1/12/2007
YAY! I'm glad to see another one of your poems after...let's see, five months! Reminds me of myself last year. No offense of course...

Your best line: "Illustrious jewels called 'stars'." But I have one small piece of advice: don't put "stars" in quotation marks. It makes the metaphor look awkward.

I love your ending. ) Keep writing!