|Reviews for Between Lines|
| Avide1 chapter 3 . 1/27
I was looking for something about the Revolutionary War that had romance and eloquence and you delivered - thank you and good job!
| Brievel chapter 22 . 1/21
I really loved this story, so much. The characters were done very well, (who couldn't love Andrew and Jacob?) and it broke my heart about Timothy. Abby was a compelling and lovable heroine, a wonderful girl without being a Mary-Sue. This was very well done and I can't wait to read more of your work. (
| ILoveFiction chapter 16 . 8/31/2012
Noooo! It can't be true- Andrew would never do such a thing! I think Danny's lying just because Andrew is British. Poor Abby!
| rougette chapter 22 . 7/5/2012
Oh my goodness! After I read every one of your stories, I'm always sure that it can't be topped. But this has got to be my favorite of all :) since it was the 4th of July and all of the patriotic films were playing on tv, I decided to search for an American Revolution story to read. And then I remembered that you had written one I'd never read! I started reading last night and finished today. It was so addicting. I absolutely loved your characters! Abby was so wonderful to read about because she didn't stick to the mold. Although she loved to read and be outside, she was still ladylike, a loving sister, good daughter, and doting friend. And she fell in love so beautifully. I really loved the romance in this story because it was just so realistic! It reminded me of being in love for the first time, but not realizing it because I thought I had been in love before. Reading Abigail was so wonderful because it was like reading me! I also loved reading about Jacob. Because I only have sisters, I never thought good brother/sister relationships were as prevalent as they seem in books and movies. But now that I'm older and have experienced more relationships, I realize that his relationship with Abby is so realistic. So many of my friends have brothers who would die for their sisters. I just ablut had a fit when he died, and later got so excited when he lived! Charlotte was equally wonderful to read. She reminded me of my younger sister's drama, and my older sister's passion. And finally, Andrew. I loved reason Andrew far more than I have ever loved reading any other love interest. He was loving, but not desperate. Passionate, but not obsessive. And best of all, he was caring toward everyone. I loved that he rescued soldiers from the battlefield. It seemed so in character. And I admit to grinning like a geek when I read his letters to Abigail. I so loved this story, the twists and turns, the love and the pain. I only wish there had been an epilogue as your stories sometimes have. Would you ever consider adding one? I know that you haven't written anything new in a while, but I sincerely hope you do. You have such a talent as a story teller. Please continue writing, and most importantly, keep creating characters as wonderful as Captain Andrew Davenport ;)
| rico chapter 1 . 6/19/2010
Very nice intro, makes want to read the rest of the book. Good cutoff for the chapter end.
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| Arcade Melon chapter 22 . 4/20/2010
Good story, overall. I was in the mood for a period piece and this was totally the ticket. :) Congrats on finishing it, by the way. That's something I can never quite get down.
However, I can never resist giving some constructive criticism, so here goes.
First off, the ending with Jacob and whatnot. I know you said it's just sort of the way you like things, and tbh, that's totally how I am, too, but, not going to lie, I laughed out loud a little when I read the reveal. I mean, I am al about the happy ending, I just think that, in contrast to the rest of the story, this part really sticks out as being completely unbelievable. Besides which, I feel like their eventual love-conquers-all ending would have been way more poignant if what it had conquered hadn't turned out to be a complete lie. What I *did* like about this part of the story was Drew pulling soldiers to safety. I just felt like a) the chances of him actually finding Jake are so slim, and b) what kind of farmer and wife spend their time rummaging around battlefields for wounded soldiers to nurse? Then again, I admit my knowledge of the revolutionary war is pretty sparse - maybe this was a common practice for patriots? If not, maybe Drew just needed to be slightly more involved...maybe he dragged wounded soldiers to a nearby barn or something, rather than a ditch. From what I understand, these battles were commonly fought basically in people's backyards, right?
On the historical note, one more thing I noticed was that they wouldn't have sterilized the needle for Drew's stitches. Germs weren't even a concept until at least the late 1800's, I'm pretty sure. But that's a little nitpicky.
And in a more general writing sense, I'd just like to reiterate the common "show, don't tell" wisdom. A lot of the time I felt very removed from the story, because I was just hearing a description of how someone felt, or what a situation was like. To pick one instance, when you're describing Jonathan's opinion of Danny: Jonathan doesn't get much development, which is totally understandable given his minor role, but I feel like it's sort of a good opportunity missed when danny's being a jerk at dinner and the scene is just a description of how jonathan know's he's a jerk. Why not show the scene where Jonathan expresses to Laurie his concerns over having Danny for dinner, for instance? This is definitely something I struggle with on the occasions I try my hand at writing as well, but I think little scenes like that really help to round out the story and also bring the reader in at a closer level.
I also wanted to mention that I thought you did the time jumps well. I particularly liked the time jumps marked by letters, like the year you did in letters. I think this could almost go even further - for instance fleshing out the correspondence more fully. I realize the letters are supposed to be scarce, but including more letters from Abby to the boys, for instance, might serve to fill out the time more fully. It also might be worthwhile to invest a little more time describing just like, the passing of time for some of the bigger time jumps. Just to give like, a small amount of context about what was going on in the war at the beginning of a time-jumped chapter might serve to make the passing of time more obvious.
Oh, and I could probably think of things to nitpick about for ages still, but that pretty much covers all the big points, I think, and this review is getting long. Despite how long I've just spent talking about things you can fix, I do thing this is a very solid story, with some good characterization and a solid historical context that is (mostly!) realistically portrayed. :P
| dwpea chapter 22 . 11/3/2009
i finally finished my exams and to treat myself i read your story. I know this is one of your older stories but it was the only one left i had not yet read. It was really nice. Ticked all my boxes for a great story. The use of letters was really (really) effective for character development and insight! I wish you would have written one more chapter on their future together...but nevertheless i'm more than satisfied! Jake didn't end up finding anyone but with his character and looks i'm positive he had a happy ending too! I'm really glad jake came back...]
Thank you for your wonderful story!
| Ciela Aurelia chapter 22 . 8/11/2009
I believe this story was much more to my tastes than Captivated. I just love all the drama! The flow of the story is good, but the end is a little weak. I feel like there could have been one more chapter to just give it a sense of finality. Also, the story was consistently sprinkled with spelling and grammar errors. Perhaps an editing is in need? Other than that, it was quite enjoyable to read.
| Counting Petals chapter 1 . 8/4/2009
I don't generally gravitate toward the American Revolution, but it was interesting to see an HR set then, so I had to check it out. You didn't disappoint. )
| Kayla chapter 22 . 7/10/2009
The story has a really good plot, and is very well written good job! Though I do think the Jacob alive part was a little out there it was still really good I loved the story.
| Shelby chapter 22 . 6/29/2009
That was AWESOME! I loved the way you made Drew rescue Jacob instead of killing him. Keep on writing.
| susan chapter 22 . 9/23/2008
I really like this story. it was so interesting
| Rome's Daughter chapter 22 . 9/11/2008
Thanks for the review on my story. I thought I'd return the favor and look at yours. I'm glad I did!
I've always loved historical romance especially when enemies learn to love one another. This was a very lovely exceptional story. I loved Drew from the beginning. Danny was sweet too, I feel so bad for him. But when he told Abby that Drew had killed Jake, I immediately thought, 'liar!'
I was so sad when he 'died' though. And was so happy when he came back! That was amazingly awesome.
I'll read your other stories some other time when I HAVE time. Great job though!
| xXSunshineGirlXx chapter 2 . 6/26/2008
Hey! This story is really good so far, I love it! I'm also very glad that I changed my mind about my own story plot, otherwise it would have seemed very much like yours . . . I really do think that this story is great . . . I'll try to finish it as soon as I can!
| Highlands chapter 21 . 5/29/2008
hi lee, i love your well written stories. tis bout abby and drew. how i wish there was am epilogue bout their weddin or something. i love your story on finding grey too. pls keep writing and update soon! thanks once more! beautiful!