|Reviews for Sand Angels|
| IcanzIIravor chapter 6 . 6/26/2016
I really enjoyed reading this. I hope you update it again one of these years:)
| blackandbluewolf727 chapter 6 . 10/1/2012
Great story... and great chapters... and characters! Loved them... they're really cool! Somehow I'm suspecting that Ronnie will get pregnant... and Sully too, or just Sully...or just Ronnie... (I know, I'm confusing...) I hope you can update soon! :D
| The Happy Carrot chapter 6 . 8/21/2007
I really enjoyed reading what you have so far of this story. It is a great idea, and i hope you get alot farther then just the regular 15 chapters. I would really enjoy reading ALOT more of this. The only part that got me confused was in Chapter 4
"Ronnie is clinging to Jason, whining about something. And then he catches my eye.
"'I'll be right back, okay?' I say to Aunt Natalie, who is still talking about college. I run up to him, and slip my hands over his eyes."
That part really confused me, because you wrote it as if it was Jason catching her eye, and then i was like "well why would Jason be trying to catch her eye?" and then it all clicked after i read on.
So that's my only confusion. Also I'm really sad you changed his name.. haha i really really really love the name Adam :)
Anyways, this review has been long enough, I would really like to see another chapter soon. You have an impeccable writing style, never lose that!
OH, Aubrie, does come off as kind of a bitch.. haha just to let you know.
Anyways i'll catch you later alligator ;)
Signed - THC
| xXxWritersXBlockxXx chapter 6 . 8/19/2007
*sigh* alas, my writer's block and i are in the middle of a mexican stand off. hopefully i'll be the victor.
it wasn't to mushy, which is good. :P hope you're able to updat soon, i too start school pretty soon. unless of course, by some tragic accident it were to burn down...LoL
| Yaz chapter 6 . 8/19/2007
Of course I'm yer biggest fan. :D YOU NEED NOT EVEN ASK. Oh you tease me, Maroon 5 and Norah Jones and Legend all in one chapter. ;) I like this chapter, it's a bit more light-hearted than the others and I found it funny how Mona was walking on nails the whole time wondering if Chris was going to expose his hidden feelings. I hope she gets on level ground with Crystal soon, though. Update soon...
| mia5081 chapter 6 . 8/19/2007
Aubrie is not a bitch, but her character makes me laugh lol. I love this chapter, there was so much Chris/Mona action it made me happy; and she still has his sweatshirt! Yay ) lol
| xXxWritersXBlockxXx chapter 5 . 7/12/2007
hey! you're not aloud to go on vaction and leave the story hanging! lol. i think this chapter was great! and don't worry, the Lamoore Resort part wasn't boring. it gave a perfect introduction for Aubrie.
please update as soon as you get back from vacation!
| The Day After Tomorrow chapter 5 . 7/3/2007
Nothing gold can stay, Sodapop. D: Hehehe, I read the Outsiders forever ago...BUT I shall say I think this was your best chapter yet! I loved it to bits and bits and bits. And of course you know I still love Ronnie x3 And I lol'd at that part "Rusty is the BIKE, Mona." and this line "You would've thought they walked on me having sex rather than just lounging in front of the television." Hee. I can't wait until the next update! D:
| mia5081 chapter 5 . 7/3/2007
i love Christian lol, and well, Ronnie is getting on my last nerves. i'm not sure whether to laugh at her dramatics...or slap her...or both! lol
| sRoze chapter 5 . 7/3/2007
And guess what. The friend I have, who I call Ron, her real name is Veronica. D So to say the least, it felt abit disturbing reading how Ronnie slept wth Jason. LOL.
And one more thing that makes me relate to Mona's character alot is that, both our dads aren't around very often. And it's just like how Mona holds some animosity for her dad for his absence. )
I forgot to let you know about how I feel about the name-change from Adam to Christian, so.. just telling you that it doesn't spoil anything! Somehow, I like "Chris" more than "Adam", so I've nothing to say there.
Haha, I didn't know they were references to "The Outsider"! But you explained about them at your footnotes, so that cleared up things. How about if next time you explain them IN the story itself? Like, make Mona think to herself that "Ponyboy" means something, or how she finds the Outsider jokes funny, or something that enlightens the reader to the fact that all those terms are from somewhere. )
Just an opinion! I'm just really glad that you updated this so fast. Somehow, listening to Vanessa Anne Hudgens' "Say Okay" puts me in the right sort of mood to read fics like this. P
Remember I was saying that the realism in this story is what makes it so appealing? I like the fact that Chris and Mona doesn't feel the need to BE with each other every second. Like how Chris says he has to go home even though it was such a potentially romantic scene: just the two of them on a quiet seaside cave. But something tells me that there'll be more opportunities like this; all I need to do is to wait for them.
You sure know how to make readers longing for more! D Aubrie sounds like a cool girl alright. And why do I get the idea that Ray was disappointed because Mona didn't want to stay, and he's stuck with that sweaty boy.. Andrew right. Ahh! Pervy old man. x_x
Anyway hey! Will be looking forward to the next update! Don't make us wait too long, aite! And I see you've changed your synopsis as well. Don't worry, all these changes are insignificant just as long as you don't change your mind about continuing this story! D
Keep up the good work!
P.S. Actually, I think maybe I find it easy to relate to your characters, especially Mona since this story is from her point-of-view, is the use of present tenses. It makes me feel like I'm IN the story, watching it as things unfold. Very clever way of drawing readers into your ficional world! D
| 123123123123123po chapter 5 . 7/3/2007
the title now suits the story i feel
and i LOVEED this chapter! total awsomness
| sRoze chapter 4 . 7/2/2007
Finished everything! Only four chapters! I was so disappointed when I reached the end of Chapter Four and realized there was no NEXT button for me to click on. Sigh.
Anyway, just like some of the reviews here mentioned, I really like the realism in your story. Everything sounds like it COUld happen in real life, and therein lies the charm of your story. I could easily place myself in Mona's shoes, and feel whatever she's feeling.
It's in your words. I especially love the line where you described as being "lost in constellation, and Damien working hard, building a palace for me, one tower at time."
The line had such a strong imagery that... even if you didn't explain anything, I understood what was going on. If that made sense. )
And I'm still not quite over the fact that there were so many similarities between the characters in your story, and the people in my life. D
You sure we don't know each other? P
| sRoze chapter 2 . 7/2/2007
Ohmigod. Do I know you? Because I just so happen to have a friend whose nick is Ron, and we both have a guy friend called Jason, and.. she can be rather dramatic at times. Plus she has dogs!
Plus you said Ronnie is more Sully's friend, right? My name starts with a Su too! And Mona called Sully "Sully Wully"; and I've been called Su _ _ y Wuzzy as well!
Very, very coincendental until it borders on cool freakiness. DD
Off to read the remaining updates! Sorry I wasn't around when this got up. Haha! Will be back once I'm done with the chapters! _
| xXxWritersXBlockxXx chapter 4 . 6/20/2007
i thought it was good, i hope you update soon!
| mia5081 chapter 4 . 5/17/2007
i like it!
update soon )