Reviews for Cupid's Wolf |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Why did she kill Alexis? o_O |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, Author. |
![]() ![]() ![]() xD Awesome. I love this story already. :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() AWESOME! Thanks for the great read, can't wait to read your future stories! |
![]() ![]() ![]() .. I wasn't even expecting to like this yknow? I was kinda expecting it to be pretty dang cliche or too actiony, but it was just perfect. I read all this in about 2 days! I don't put that much time in unless I really like it. Continue writing author :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is awesome! i like it so much! _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow I think thats the fastest ive ever read a story (you know a long one) two days :) win. This story has been seriously addictive. One thing thats slightly confusing is the switching of perspective. Other than that I loved it :) X |
![]() ![]() ![]() ;w; Will!DD; must. read. next. chapter . . . |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh I was wondering 'why would I want to kill you?' at your A/N cause I LOVE this chapter! Even though it has a cliff hanger xDD |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh wow I feel so bad for FINALLY choosing this time to start reviewing this story. Anyways, I love this whole flashback thing :D Haha you always seem to make me smile and laugh when reading your stories! I wish I had your sense of humor and writing style. This story's so good, I'm currently reading this 11pm. -eagerly reads next chapter- |
![]() ![]() ![]() Haha,I LOVE your sense of humor! Aphrodite's hilarious xDD Cupid is so cute and I aw'ed at the end. O More reason to love the name Will! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am so glad that I found this story. It was really good. I couldn't stop reading it. xD Tomorrow! The sequel. :3 -Emma |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I know you finished this story awhile ago, but I was wondering if you ever did write a sequel for this story? I'm kind of curious to see what could happen with Abby. If you haven't written a sequel yet, or still considering it even though it as been awhile, I'd love reading a sequel. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The summary didn't tell me much about the story at all, which I hope you can change in the future, since a reader needs to know something about what they're reading. Now I may or may not come out as harsh, but as a reader I feel that these things need to be clearer in your story if you want to take it seriously. To begin with, I was rather confused with the idea of Cupids. I am assuming they're like Hitch, in that they arrange for people to get together, but is that really ALL they do? Sy's reaction to a guy whistling at her seems like a big overreaction. I understand that you're trying to go with a gruff woman who won't take things lightly, but by making her too violent over a situation like whistling...the situation has to be a bit more drastic, like the guy touching her or coming onto her regardless of her obvious "I am not interested" signs. Okay, it IS interesting to know that a person like Sy should go to a job like THAT, but I really hope that her tragic past has nothing to do with it, if it is revealed that she HAS a tragic past. It's been done before. Another thing to keep in mind is that when Alli recalls how she met Sy two years ago, you only discuss it in ONE sentence of dialogue. That is bad. Again, what do we know of these characters other than that they've been partners for two years? You do a lot of telling, but not enough showing. This is evident when they are dispatched to a target. I have no idea what the background looks like, so this tense scene of nailing the target is lackluster and boring. The Spirits and the love arrows thing is a bit confusing. The characters explain it, but not well enough, as if they themselves are unsure. Allie being called Rookie is another cliche, which wouldn't have been too bad if Allie had quirks or a personality that's refreshing, but she doesn't. Sadly, she plays the Rookie role by being oblivious and clueless. Not a good start. Use less "gruff". This word is overused a lot to describe Sy's speech and mannerisms. You need to show characterization. Just saying that she's gruff does not a good character make. Of coruse, these things are easily fixed if you took the time to do so. You also need a beta to fix the many punctuation errors that are evident in the story. This is NOT a flame, but constructive criticism. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was an awesome story! It was cute, funny, unpredictable, sad and pretty much an awesome well-rounded story. Good work! -ReyeReye |