|Reviews for Campfire Tales|
| Zoius and the Devil chapter 2 . 1/22/2007
incase you didnt know, you dont allow anonymous reviews. you might get more if you do.
anyways...so. second chapter. i dont think it was too slow at all. i mean, we got to meet Tommy. anyways, what about Harris being gay? did you already say that? i often miss stuff, so maybe you did. ah well.
Harris urged himself to say something witty, hating himself more when all he said was, “okay.”
that's the only mistake i caught. should okay be capitalized?
| Zoius and the Devil chapter 1 . 1/18/2007
good start. continue, i want to see what happens.
“Skyscrapers do not a city make.”
that's all i could find. hope it helps.