Reviews for Outside a Dream |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This holds a melancholy beauty. I love the thread of the girl's dreaming of the different things throughout. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really love it; it's got a nice stream of consciousness feel to it. There was a typo in the very first line- you have "clam the door" instead of slam? As it started out it I was a little confused about what you were getting at- how is it automatically a hands vs. door thing... The line "What would they rather her break, she thinks." was a little confusing to me at first as well, maybe if it there were a comma after 'what'? |