loved your author note! very convincing. i'm one of those weirdos who actually enjoys reading when authors plead for reviews.

This is highly intriguing and the possibility of reviewing every chapter is no longer a possibility, but a necessity. Gods, I am enjoying this - but it was a bit hard to read due to the formatting. Did you upload this in story form?

~Cristina

Haha, will do. And I'm laughing at the first line of the note... please don't wring my neck! XD

Arg! Rosemistress guessed everything I was thinking to review. Grr... fine. Next time I'll be sure to review before she does. Hahahahaha! But still, why was Lesslyth the only one not killed? Just by that we know she's special, or maybe they were just waiting for her to reach a certain age to kill her. Or maybe Mama and Eliza discovered something about Less no woman is supposed to know until seconds before the die die die! So many questions, such a short chapter (with many spaces between the lines might I add. Can't wait for it's follow up.

I like it a lot. Really interesting.

something to make provedsha yucille angry? could it be her life? as in, she's still aive, compared to her mother and sister, who were cruelly murdered for a reason we have yet to find out? and to increase that...could it be that she will become a provedshi herself? that would make her more jelous, no? or could it have something to do with ilas? after all, he was supposedly the "perfect guy". that could easily provoke hatred...or what about the fact that she was able to bear a child? what if provedsha yucille can't have children? maybe that got her angry, bcs lesslyth got "special treatment"...ok, i'll stop formulating theories out of thin air and wait for the next chapter...it IS very, VERY interesting, as well as intriguing. _

i'd read this like 2 weeks ago, and when i was gonna review, my internet went crazy. anyway: this certainly looks interesting, and quite entertaining. i'm intrigued as to what will happen..and considering there's a second chapter already, i'll get to that and write a better review after that _'

A well-written chapter and the story is getting so interesting!Can't wait for the next update!

Nice chapter. It got my attention here with the sacrifice but you can't stop there. In the next chapter you have to make sure to you start winning me over. Make me fall in love with Lesslyth or put me some action scene. Win me all over again.

God you're strict and demanding. I think I'm liking you even more. Killer author's note. Had me laughing. I accept the terms of it.

Wow. Honey. I absolutely respect you for your author note. It's getting hard to find someone who actually reminds us up front what this Fictionpress-thing is all about, and your note just brought that back to me.

So, my con crit? I love the premise. Lust always gets me, I confess. However, your paragraphs are too long. A myth isn't always the best place to start a story-though yours is pretty fine as it tackles something as interesting as human sacrifice-but it could be improved if you break it down into smaller, more manageable chunks. Myths aren't the most exciting things, really, and if the words are so packed they start swimming in front of the eyes, well... that's not a good thing.

Um. And "alter" means changing something. "Altar" is the word you're looking for.

All in all, 'tis a good itroduction, rather intriguing if one could summon up the patience to read through it. But it might be better if you start with the action; show us why we should caee about this Lesslyth girl and her world of Eithnee.

I guess I'm the first one to submit a review and yeah by the way your author note was awesome lol:)Yeah,so I decided to read it and I promise that I will leave a review for every chapter,so I can surviveD

Well its the first chapter so I can't say much about the sory but I do like the like a whole new fantasy world and its awesome.I guess you will write more about Lesslyth in the next chapters and I want to know what she looks ,hope you update soon!

you-know-who;)haha lol