well this sure has humor in it D

hehe, this intro chap was really fun.

Hi!

This story is really different from Dog Walker; i think i like this one better! :) (Though both are very good)

i liked the first couple sentences of the story.

"And I had done it again. I was an idiot. Worse than an idiot, I was an idiot that didn’t learn from mistakes. This was probably the 5th time now. I couldn’t believe myself, and I was starting to get cold.

I had forgotten to get a towel, again"

i was on the edge of my seat and thinking oh something juicy and it turned out to be her towel...haha i laughed out loud. Funny line.

So the current chapter, does that mean that Jay/Jacob DID rob Kat's house? Hmm..

Good story, good writing

THank you!

i thought you wrote this very well! the only thing that would have made it better would be if you made it longer (i.e. i want to read more cuz i love this story).

this story is SO good. i love it. its probable my favorite story. i cant wait till you update.

are you from canada? cause torch in america is called flashlight.. and we're not legally allowed to drink till we're 21. that's cool that you're from there if you are though!

You know the song of Fall Out Boy's where the lyrics go

"Were the chemists who found the formula

To make your heart swell and burst." (I'll figure the song name out by the end of my review)

Well YOU -CERTAINLY- found it too! I LOVED IT! I LOVE how protective Lydia is, I LOVED the reactions of Jay and Lyd when he found her in his house. I can't WAIT to know what Lydia's reaction's gunna be when she finds out Jay DIDN'T do it. (... I guess I believe him. Coolio!)

The Fall Out Boy song I was talking about is From Under the Cork Tree's "Sophomore Slump or Comeback of the Year" Mua ha ha! (I was excited to find these lyrics because I've had the sensation (swell and burst, type) before but was never able to describe it. Now I CAN!

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR UPDATING!

Please update soon!

this is good so far. i wonder who it could be that's robbing the houses if not jay? well anyways i hope you update soon!

Great chapter. Everything sounded right, don't worry about it. I have nothing to criticise on - that, or I don't feel like criticising your chapter at the moment. Those episodes of CSI really paid off, huh?

its fiine, keep writing!

sincerely,

ALS

you crack me up, my lobster! i don't know why but every house i picture in this story is your old house. maybe it's because Lydia sounds so much like you it's crazy. (that's a good thing because she's delightfully quirky. LIKE YOU.)

seriously, though. when she's sneaking through the house, she's hilarious. YOU FUNNY. I TIRED. I JUST SNEEZED. LOVE YOU. BYE!

...

she broke into the house...

SHE broke into the HOUSE...

seriously is that the only thing that is going on? or should i push a little more?

this story is getting...annoying...

I can't tkae it!

I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!

Ooh, she broke in. I loved the idea of Lydia finding the key instead of her being able to bobby pin her way through the door; simply because, the key brought humor into the chapter, and the idea of the heroines always being able to pin their way through the door is a little over-used...I think you stuck with Lydia's character...as for Jay...can I have him? Please? lol

Update soon!

~Mia

I cant seem to remember Jays age..you said that he was about Lyds age, right? If its not too much mind sending me the barebone facts about both characters. I loved how Lyd broke into Jays house, haha that shows fantastic spunk!