Reviews for You say coincidence, I say bad luck
Shadow of the Black Wolf chapter 2 . 2/6/2007
That was funny. Seems as if Jay is in the category of smartass. Gotta love them. Waiting..
Murphy's Lawyer chapter 2 . 2/5/2007
YAY!

You say you didn't do so great with this story, I say it rocked!

Haha play on your title there. Didya notice? _

Anyhoot, update soon! I'll be waiting...

- LL

PS. Is Dog Walker really over? NO! I want more! MORE, dammit! (Don't mind me. Minor temper tantrum. I'll get over it in about ten minutes or so.. or less!)
Nerdette chapter 2 . 2/5/2007
This girl is CRAZY! No joke.
Alenor chapter 2 . 2/4/2007
heya, this is great so far, i can't wait for more ~ Alenor.
Kura-sama chapter 2 . 2/4/2007
I love this story! This is the best awkward yet interestingly entertaining moment ever XD Walking out of the shower naked while being robed by a hot guy ... and using a big teddy bear to cover yourself XD I almost laughed myself silly.

Hope you update soon~ with longer chapters! Then I will have more to read heheh
PrincessPeach131 chapter 2 . 2/3/2007
Yay! I love the start of this, it's so funny! And who cares if it's not completely realistic, what story on this site really is, withall the popular guy/loser girls, and stepbrother stories. How often does that really happen? But they're still great and wonderful and fun, just like the start of yours is. Keep writing!
toxic-noodle725 chapter 1 . 2/2/2007
ooh i likey. i like this alot so far. keep it up!
TwinkleHeart chapter 2 . 2/1/2007
whats gonna hapen D
Hilmary-Oceans chapter 2 . 1/31/2007
Hi! See! Good chapter. Hm ... not that farfetched. Though I thought that park and swing part was a little childish in a way. Try not to be too sarcastic all the time. Makes the story too sugary. But I'd love to read the build up to this! Going to be great!

xoxo

Hilmary-Oceans
icedfaerie chapter 2 . 1/30/2007
Love this story! Absolutely love it love it love it! Love the characters and I can't wait until the next chapter!
Ducky 06 chapter 2 . 1/30/2007
nice chapter! He isnt the new neighbor is he? and is there a reason for why he steals? it seemed like there might be someting in his past or something by the way you said that his face darkned when she asked him. or whatever you said. anyways, good chapter! i'm eagerly awaiting the next! oh, and will she ever turn him in? im gonna guess not.
EyreAffair chapter 2 . 1/30/2007
sure you didnt, darling.

anyway i love it! Jay...he sounds like a jaywalker. put that in.

is he hot? have you described him? he can be hot in my mind. can he be irish? and have blue eyes. 'suchnsuch has the coolest eyes'

hehe

anyway nice writing, keep it up
dee chapter 2 . 1/29/2007
heheheheh! i like!

ok i know its a completely useless review but i hope u get warm and fuzzy feelings inside knowing that people like your stories enough to write stupid things like 'hehehehehe! i like!'

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CarlyJo chapter 2 . 1/29/2007
Awesome. Thos os a truly original story. Update soon!
A.H. Star chapter 2 . 1/29/2007
lol, i think i'm really going to like this story, the first two chapters made me laugh! Please update again soon! I'm really interested in how this story turns out ].
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