|Reviews for The Power In All|
| Malise Ling chapter 8 . 7/17/2007
You have no Idea how much I wished I had kept track of everyone's stories.
I loved the end of the last chapter. I was hardcore cheering man!
Btw. News from the home front. I broke up with Ben. No reason really...(shrug)
| Guest chapter 8 . 7/12/2007
well...that ending kinda sucked...it was a really good story...loved it...then it just ended so abrubtly...then again...maybe it was better that way?
| Bob Evans chapter 8 . 7/10/2007
Okay Jon, now you've got some shoes to fill for Book 2. I'm really looking forward to how you plan to end it, since you're still thinking up the plot.
| Reaper chapter 7 . 5/10/2007
Three chapters since I last read tis. Nice one. Very cool, I like the whole "It bugged us, but it kept the rumours at bay of me being gay"
That made me laugh. and the whole Death conversation was also funny. May not have the best plot but then again, some of the greatest things had no plot. Postal, Bad Boys 2...maybe Lost (Seriously, it has no plot)
| jadeisms chapter 7 . 5/3/2007
i liked that last conversation in it...
that whole dieing thing? yeah? I'm not gonna do that..
| Bob Evans chapter 6 . 5/3/2007
Hey, FP is being weird again, so this review is really for Chapter 7.
Yeah, figures. Tale being bravado enough to take on Death. Seems almost...poetic. Although I think the beginning was a little rushed. We didn't get to know much about Tale's brother, or the weird government agent. But I guess he did get stabbed before we had a chance. Eddy and his avatar better come to the rescue.
| R.E.D. the animator chapter 7 . 5/2/2007
I guess Tale was fighting death. Get it? Never mind.
You did make one mistake though: his eyes turned to slits and that’s when I noticed that he was looking past us up at the rode.
| Bob Evans chapter 1 . 4/26/2007
Hmm, Fiction Press is being weird again, but this review is for Chapter 6, so here we go.
First off, I'm wondering how long Mr. R.E.D. has left to live before you kill him for his review (unless you're feeling rather tolerant today).
Secondly, although I have to agree with SOME of his points, I think it's just part of the learning curve. Plus, it's always fun to see your stuff up here, so keep writing reguardless of what the nasty reviewers say (Ms. Critic would tear this story apart if she ever saw it).
Thirdly; I'm impressed with the work you've put into it. Thumbs up! So don't let life get you down, turn that frown upside down, and keep rolling forward.
Almost done? Pfft, it can't be over yet. Take this plot somewhere great. Thanks for the 'thank-you'!
P.S. I'm going to do a couple more edits to Chap.1 of TSG2, and then I think we should seriously consider posting soon.
| R.E.D. the animator chapter 6 . 4/26/2007
Didn't you forget to acnolage a certain reviewer at the end of your chapter.
Just kidding. But on a more serious note, you don't need to write BOM! to make people reallize that it was a big boom. You can do that if it's someone talking. For example "I had a long sandwhich this morning"
Also. If you don't do something more exciting with the plot than people flying in the air and screeming, then I'm gona delete you from my profile. Yes, that is a threat, but knowing you, your not gona take me serious anyway.
Otherwise the story is great.
| Double A chapter 5 . 4/18/2007
HMM Interrseding story so far
must raed more
just one typo though "I whiper" oops. oh well
Keep Writing Double A
| Jadeisms chapter 5 . 4/17/2007
hey I'm calling you tonight...but i'm *67 so don't worry..anyways...
you and richard...Gah...i had 50 emails notifying me that you guys were in the forums...and they weren't sent in the right order...
i love you...Don't worry about my ankle..k?..Jade's fine...
KENZI ISH NO LONGER SINGLE!..haha...
anyways else...(yeah cuz that made sense)
great chapter...(i also have to note that you didn't switch outta charecter this time..WOOT...lol..
you're sending mah letters tommorrow?..YAY!
| R.E.D. the animator chapter 4 . 4/16/2007
Yes! Yes! YES!
Finaly! I was beginning to think that you would never post the next chapter. That being said, I may have forgotten all your charcter's names.
I'm working on my second story at the moment.
| Bob Evans chapter 5 . 4/16/2007
HOLY CRAP! You're back!
I never thought I would see an update to this story again, but I guess the pigs are flying...there goes on right now.
I guess it's been awhile since I read, but were Tale and Terra hitting it off? And now they're sharing tents? Well, I guess I need to get up to speed on this.
And remember; Don't. Get. Eliminated!
| Reaper chapter 4 . 3/14/2007
Wow, random flying lamps. Very nice. read the whole thing in one go, and am now waiting for more. GIVE ME MORE!
| Jadeisms chapter 4 . 3/4/2007
ok...so i had read chapter 3..and now i'm all caught up...hehehe...
LOVE IT...sept...why does my charecter have to be tomas's gopher?...i'm to lazy in reality to do that...i'd be like "shove off..."..hehee..well...maybe...i'd make one sandwhich...*shrugs*...now..i'm not sure...GOD damn...lol
*boredom...insues while making reveiws...*