that was the greatest reed i have ever... well read. the ending was sad though. great damn job

Wow. Im no where near being done, but I'm hooked. Its only too bad I dont have time to read the rest...:( but soon. very soon.

~Blessed Be~~Chele~

I like your story so far. It could be longer the prince have a large role to play later on?

Hopefully the presumption of Prince Trav's death is false, because I could see some Rixie/Trav for a bit. I can't wait until yoou continue this, Megaman Reborn and Project: Zero

ive been reading this thing for about two days. Its bad ass keep it up

Awsome story man! You seem to have everything under control in your writing so theres nothing for us reviewers to complain about now. So good luck an I hop you get the next chap out soon.

Well, I must admit, this is good, really good. I’m immensely impressed and kept very amused by your style of writing. You seemed to be quite adequate with your grammar skills, which I am thankful for cuz I get really annoyed when people have all these mistakes. Anyway, there was one think that got on my nerves and that you might want to take a look into. You give a little too much time between phases. 5 months to let Trav heal… yeah, that’s probably how long it would have taken, but I would have just avoided the delay. Also I have a mistake. Kendau, when talking to Ryle, says he’ll have Trav dead in a week. Then SEVEN months later, he’s still participating in a tournament. Also, when writing paragraphs, you have a tendency to repeat the person’s name over and over. Trav did this. Then Trav did this. Trav then did this and that… It really annoyed me, so I suggest you look into pronouns more often. Especially in fight scenes, but if it’s two people of the same gender, it’s better to use their names so you won’t get confused. Well that’s all. I love the gore and cussing. It’s fun to read and I like the plot a lot. Keep writing, and sorry this is so long.
~Mors

Well I haven't got round to reading the rest yet but I promise I will soon. I thorougly enjoyed the first two chapters and I hope the others are as good. Hope I have a chance to read the rest of your stuff. Keep up the good work!

WOW. I really like this! It kinda reminds me of Final Fantasy IX in a way. Hmmmm...I think my favorite quote from this so far was: "picking up the usual whores along the way." *falls out of chair laughing* Bwahahahahaha!

Anyways, just letting you know that you've got a very good story, ok?

Razor

Good story you've got here. Poor Trav. I'm intersted to see what happens next. I'm always on the look out for a good story. Maybe mine wil be one. Doubt it. People hardly ever read my stories. Opps, I'm complaing again. Open mouth: Insert foot. Oh well. Anyway, keep up the good work.

Rixie? Cool! I like Rixie already. Keep it up, can't wait to read more.

Ok, comments. I like it and really want to see where it goes. Good choices of names for places and such. They sound natural and not generated. I really love the mixing of old things like the quill pen and modern items like backpacks and binders. Gives the setting an atmosphere. Couple things I would change to make the first chapter flow better.

At the beginning of the 2nd paragraph you introduce Trav and then give a history lesson. It feels choppy and IMHO would probably be better if you just centered on Trav as an individual (like you do in the 3rd paragraph) and then detail the history and his royal status through his studying like you do with the technical aspects of the armour.

I really like that method of exposition and I think the armour paragraphs can be improved slightly too. In each paragraph, mention how Trav is learning what we're reading. Mention him memorizing the details of a picture of the first generation EXOs or something along those lines.

Great introduction though. You've hooked me. Looking forward to more.

::Applause, Applause:: Very Good. I like your style of writing.

Rather intrieging. I await to see what's next.

eep, so much information...

heh, kinda' cool how it's set in a futuristic medival ages...so far so good, man.