|Reviews for In Vain|
| Matthew James Current chapter 1 . 1/20/2008
Very original approach. I liked the metaphor of cutting yourself off from the world and the questions you ask yourself. I can see that this is a very self-directed poem, sort of asking yourself a question and not knowing the answer. Very good expression with this one.
As far as criticism goes, I'd reccommend experimenting with more extended metaphors and allegory as you have here. Work on describing less and articulating more, as in less word-by-word describing and more artistic representations of what you are experiencing to continue challenging yourself to grow as a poet. Keep writing and remember that you have talent and pontential!
| HiddenFlame42 chapter 1 . 2/2/2007
6th stanza was especially beautiful. Love you hun! *hugs*