Reviews for A Liar's Mission
XXXSyxAdeleXXX chapter 3 . 10/27/2011
:) Well done, short and sweet with a feel good ending! Different and entertaining. You are a very popular writer (Stats) and I have now learned why. Keep up the good work i hope for more. XXXX

SyxAdele
XXXSyxAdeleXXX chapter 2 . 10/27/2011
Still loving it keep it up X The ending to this chapter(Sophia's diary) is really sweet/touching. Wow. Such concisely,subtly beautiful writing.
XXXSyxAdeleXXX chapter 1 . 10/27/2011
Such a strange, imaginative scenario you have created. I love it. Interesting and captivating keep it up! XXXX

Syx Adele
ohsnapples chapter 3 . 7/14/2011
It was a short story but I loved it! It was sad but had a happy ending, and I love happy endings! I really like all your work! I think that you are really talented and I hope you continue to write! :)
parapol chapter 1 . 5/10/2009
i really like this story, well, as much as i have read lols .. and you kept going on on your a/n about choppy sentences, i dont see what's wrong with them - i say it gives the story more emphasize and makes it sound better :) like i said, i'll read more when i can:D
envy me chapter 3 . 1/28/2009
Seriously, it's a really good story. I think it was sweet. And it came together nicely at the end. I think you should add a little more description to the light that is surrounding him and leave out the he sees their future and he's happy that seems too cliche. I enjoyed the last scene of her asking his permission and that showing it was time for him to depart. Really Good!
envy me chapter 2 . 1/28/2009
I think she should have been head over heels in love with him locked in a passion with him. It would make the story more interesting. Then she would have double the guilt for falling for whichever other guy she falls for. And I think you should add a little bit of description in between the dialogue.

I don't like that he's being called a druggie. There has to be a better word. Maybe just addict or saying he got caught up from drugs. Drugs made him lose all control. Fell in with the wrong crowd? Hmm..

This chapter flowed a lot better. Added to the interest. Also, I absolutely love the liars mission. Seriously that's very thought provoking
envy me chapter 1 . 1/28/2009
Ok first I'll start with the good stuff. There's a few lines I really like, like the two sentences. And "I could feel the guilt radiating off of her". I don't know if you meant that he could feel it because he was a guardian angel or not but it blended very well. Your descriptions are also very well.

The story is good. I like the whole plot so far. And I know you said this is old so don't take offense to any of my constructive criticism. First off, some things were kind of stereotypical or predictable. But I guess we can't help that at times. And the way you used words like "heck" and "freaking", I didn't like that. That probably doesn't matter to some people but it has always bothered me for some reason. It makes me feel like the character or author is childish or not brave enough to take the risk to say "fuck".

But overall it's good and I'm ready to continue.

BTW I take it your a big twilight fan with your "bella" character and username. They are very good books. Love how it's a whole warped version of romeo and juliet. I heard the last two books were great. Only read the second one myself.
C. Welsford chapter 3 . 12/23/2008
Am I a bad person if I said the ending was a little abrupt? Not that it's a bad ending (because the ending is really sweet) but it seemed that you could have gotten so much more out of the idea than this. Just a thought.
C. Welsford chapter 2 . 12/23/2008
I probably should have mentioned this for the last chapter, but I really like how you incorporate excerpts of Sofia's diary. It really brings the story together.
C. Welsford chapter 1 . 12/23/2008
Okay, I know I'm about two years late (and that this isn't one of your recent stories anyway) but I love this! Wyatt seems like a sweet guy. A druggie, but a sweet guy nonetheless.
Starapollo1 chapter 1 . 9/26/2008
Wow, yo ucertaintly live up to your repuatation of being a good wirter. I really liked this chapter and I can't wait to read more. Now to specifics. I liked Wyatts posivesness of Sophie, it made him seem in some ways over protected but showed he did care. Your description, well I have seen better, I mean stories have to have description to make them good, and while there was some, you could've ad more, like, what does sophie look like. I will give it too yo uthat when it came to describing his feeling s you did a good job which is why I have to say I like Edmond much more than Wyatt. And I think Sophie and Edmond hsould live happily ever and make that ass hole wyatt watch. hehe. No seriosly good job on that, and I also thought that Sophie's dialouge at the end was pretty strong and kept my attentio, which is hard to do when your ending a chpater like that.
wreckless.and.jealous chapter 1 . 8/24/2008
I know I shouldn't be laughing at the part where he goes 'Did I do that' but I was watching 'Family Matters' and Steve always says that catch phrase.

I like this story, it reminds me of 'lovely bones'. I also really like the excerpts. It made me understand easily and quickly enough.

.jealous

P.S. I think you got a double Auuthor's note thing on the top.
l3g3nd chapter 3 . 8/15/2008
Wow this is a nice story. I love it a lot!

Good use of first-person narration (which a lot authors failed to do), and I must praise you for infusing the story with a number of underlying theme.

"Love is the ultimate drug" and the redemption part are my favorite. Nice concept of Sofia whispering to her own guardian angel towards the end of this story. Nice, really nice...Haha...

Anyway, happy writing, hehe. Thanks for the nice story yeh

L
PandaPanda chapter 3 . 8/4/2008
That was such a lovely way to end the story, they've all moved on. It was a great story overall!
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