|Reviews for Suprising Snack|
| StaringATAwall chapter 1 . 2/19/2009
I liked the humour in it especially.
Some good points: good rhyming and it was too the point.
Lines 4 and 5 rhymed, fine, but they didn't flow, it wasn't balanced. "Though his tummy..." would definetely work, "but his tummy..." might work, i don't know.
Overall: good little amusing poem.
| hay-ley chapter 1 . 2/19/2007
hah LOL thats cute, good job rissa :D
| MaryCurly chapter 1 . 1/31/2007