Absolutely loved it! Can't wait to read more of your work.

I am definitely captured by this beginning! _

I love this story you should get it published if it isn't already! P

OH MY GOD
OH MY GOD

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OH MY GOD

THIS
THIS
THIS
IS BEAUTIFUL. I LOVE IT. SO MUCH. THIS IS AMAZING. THANK YOU SO MUCH! OH MY GOD I LOVE THIS SO MUCH! Your style and your storytelling ability is fantastic! I was so immersed in this piece, I could not stop once I had started! 5 hours later, and I'm eagerly rushing this review so that I may continue the sequel!

I love your characters! So many, so well developed, so thoughtful and so well written! Kieran is fantastic! I loved him from the first paragraph! So kind hearted and devoted. The quality I have always valued most in life is loyalty, and Kieran's fidelity is so unwavering; he is easily my favourite character. I love his creativity his modesty. Edouard is also such a beautiful soul! So kind and level-headed and filled with a passion for life that I wish I had! I also love Colwyn. He's got such a father-ly feel about him, I'm so glad he turned out to be such a great character. I was unsure of how to feel about Anister at the beginning, but I think I quite like her. Her conversation with Kieran on the ferry to the White Shores helped change my mind. I'm also a bit undecided about Divwell. I liked her quite a bit at the beginning, but her suspicion of Kieran is a little disappointing, to me.

I love the world you've created, and moreover, I love how you've SHOWED it to us! So many authors struggle with this; they TELL instead of SHOW, but you SHOW US your world so artfully! I will admit that at the beginning, in the first few chapters, all the things with magic felt like you were telling us how it work, instead of showing us, but after that, you weaved it into the storytelling so well! Your world so so rich and constructed so thoughtfully! It's so beautiful and wonderful and yet you've only told us enough to understand it, and not so much that it feels detached and textbook-y. So beautiful!

AH I LOVE THIS PIECE OF WORK SO MUCH! HOW DOES IT ONLY HAVE 80 REVIEWS? THIS IS A TRAVESTY! Thank you so much for writing this and sharing it with all of us! Your words made me laugh at the jokes, bounce up and down in my seat with joy, grip my sheets in fear, and the action in the last few chapters had my heart rate through the roof! LOVE IT! THANK YOU SO MUCH! *heart*

As this story was already complete when I started reading I could finish it in one go. What a wonderful story you have created. The world you created shaped before my minds eye while I was reading.
Maybe it's because of this story is about a young wizard but it made me think of Harry Potter. Not because the story is similar but it does read equally fluently, The end unfolded itself pretty quickly, just like HP. But to be honest, I enjoyed this story more.
The characters are not over analysed and there is a good amount of description in the story as well.
Thank you so much for sharing this story! :)

While I did enjoy this story, its lack of real struggle made it two-dimentional for me. There was no genuine challenge standing in the way of Kieran and Edouard, even though it almost seemed at one point that Imbario would live up to his role as antagonist (with the death of the king), but he was just too easily thwarted. This lack of challenge made the end too predictable, passive and an easy downhill romp for the main characters.

Another thing that almost had me stop reading was Colwyn's constant gushing of how powerful and important Kieran would undoubtedly be when he first found him. Even though your writing is very good, that particular bit made the whole story feel amatuerish.

A minor observation: I found it very odd that the king, who'd been around for quite a while, had no close friends, advisors or other secondary characters around him other than Imbario. Even Edouard had his two manservants. The lack of any relationships felt too simplistic.

That being said, I liked how Keiran didn't act like the hero and was more or less genuine. You're also very good at keeping things interesting by mixing the right amount of description and action. One of the easiest ways of losing your reader is over analyzing charaters' thoughts and feelings, and over describing both characters and places.

Well, that's it from me. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed it while it lasted.

i love it...

This story is great. You describe things really well and have a big vocabulary. I couldn't find any mistakes in this - I'm a bit outclassed here! Amazing story.

I've just finished reading your story and i must say it was great and i really enjoyed myself Thanks for sharing

Your descriptive writing is excellent. This scene reminds me of the beginning of Eragon, have you read it?

I reread this and I cannot believe you don't have more reviews! Lol. You should really try and publish this series!

ugh these people sound like a bunch of pretenious bastards in waiting specially these so called noble wizards

great story! thanks for sharing!

This is the kind of story I love to read. I don't read anything that doesn't capture my attention, you sir, have captured my attention!

The link between the 2, it's like magnets, but so beautiful because we're looking at 2 children who still have this core of innocence despite the harsh realities of their life. I really like these characters, Kieran's quiet strength & absolute loyalty, Edouard's wisdom before his age... There is also a lot of work done on creating the Wizard's world. No wonder why it's one of my favorites!