The story was really nice but you kept shifting between present tense and future tense.

speechless

Oh..my..gosh...

That was tragic. Heartbreaking. Bittersweet. Reality, I suppose.

This is a beautiful pice of work. So sad that I couldn't even cry.

Beautifully written.

Lovely one-shot ;)

I cried at the end, the part where you described life. Love it, and maybe the crying on my part was unexpected. But it just hit me suddenly and yeah, today was a good day until someone spoilt everything.

Thanks for writing this :)

~bel

This is beautiful, it really is.

Is this written in second person, because I feel like it is, but am not sure.

It's adorable, heart-breaking, and has the ability to make one sigh in content.

I love it.

You're amazing at writing! And this was fantastique.

:D

kthnxbai,

Martin the Waterskier

now THIS needs to be published.

it is so unbelievably moving. it goes from a lighthearted sweet highschool crush to death and the effects of war...

i'm going to send it to a friend who needs to read something like this. thank you.

that last part made me almost cry. but it was very beautifully written!

Serindraxx

That made me cry.

I loved it

Lovely. That is a very beautiful retelling of love. I like it a lot.

First of all, I really love the style that this was written in. It's future-tense, but it's almost written like the present. If it were me, I probably would have dropped it by the second section.

This was really beautiful, the way it shows that life just rolls on and on and on. She knew he had to go, and she let him. It's something, it really is. And I think it shows the strength of Love with a captital L; not just romantic, not just familiar, not just between friends. It's all three, and to be able to capture something of that is really, really beautiful. Because to make it work for so long takes THAT kind of love, not just the romantic kind.

I sort of think that there should have been a couple of rocky spots in their relationship itself that could have been written. It's a bit fairy-tale-ish to not have anything like that, though I suppose the war and him the in nursing home was part of it. They still stayed close, though. Almost unrealistically so. When one comes back from a war, one has a lot of emotional baggage and in some ways it may seem as though he's a completely different person, and for him to just shut it out and ignore it and be unable to talk about it to even his own wife, that's not good, psychologically speaking. They would probably have to make their relationship anew, almost.

I think it would spoil a lot of it to dwell on the bad times, but to at least mention them is something I think that you should consider.

To be honest, in the beginning I wasn't all too sure that I wanted to read this. It seemed a bit too unrealistic and corny for my tastes. But it turned out to be fluffy and sweet and slightly depressing at the end. I could tell that it was quite spur-of-the-moment, though. Not in a bad way, but there is a certain quality there that makes it stand out when compared to a long, thought-out story like Fine Line.

It was lovely, and I think that I'm going to favorite it,

CD 1.0

Oh my god. That was so sweet. The ending almost made me cry. Sniff. I loved it!

-Sarah

Aww, the last parts almost made me cry. Almost (I can't cry in front of my whole freakin' family!)

That was some good stuff. WoW.

may your life be filled with magic

not a geek freak

I love the ending. I love the whole story, but I really, really, really love the ending. It just fits so perfectly.

At first, with the summary and the beginning, I thought maybe he was going to be evil and kill her or something... Yeah, my mind tends to jump straight to the impossibly disturbing.

Wow... that was just... beautiful. It was nice, to read something that wasn't full of angst (hey, I said FULL of angst!) And... damn, you almost made me cry. I loved the way you formatted it, and I love all of the moments in time. Great, great job on this, I'm glad I read it.

-Ally

You had me wiping tears out of my eyes at the end of it there. I really liked how you set it up, and the tone you used. It resembled part of life to, in one way or another. I really liked it!

I would also like to tell you that you have an amazing taste in music.