|Reviews for red|
| eldrin chapter 1 . 2/12/2007
Really, rather impressive piece. 'Red' is a simple title that really follows through on the impact of the words.
"(will all of this such perfect bliss -)" is a little long-sounding/awkward. I don't think that 'such' works very well here - that hardsh '-ch' sound rolling into a soft '-iss' just halts the tones.
It's really nice to see such ease of alliteration in image phrases like "a smile and a slide of skin."
A lovely piece.
| she smolders chapter 1 . 2/6/2007
The imagery from this was splendid and bittersweet.
| VELVETxKISSES chapter 1 . 2/3/2007
o kewli! you rock Rebecca!