Reviews for ending
eldrin chapter 1 . 2/11/2007
Very impressive piece. "let lust breed from your cold again" and "let my heart breathe lies" are wonderful whispers of uncontrolled permisions. I can't say that imagery tends to be a stong point/focus in your poems, but "let lust breed from your cold again" is perfectly eye/soul-chilling.
as beauty dies chapter 1 . 2/3/2007
This. Is. Really. GOOD.

Seriously, I've been looking around for some good poetry and this is damn good poetry. The style is crisp and beautiful, it fits the theme and disjointed thoughts of the speaker. The use of italics iis consistant and just, wow.

I really liked it. A lot.

- Noelle
magnusthewolf chapter 1 . 2/3/2007
very powerful and touching piece. i love the ending especially. keep writing :)