Reviews for Incomplete
meme12 chapter 1 . 2/21/2010
Hi there meme12 here! I love this story in the way that the feelings are expressed! Pls write more! Pls!

Anters chapter 1 . 3/30/2007
Wo! Only found two grammar mistakes. ;)

Anyways, this was very well written, and very real. I like the line "He had waited a lifetime." It kinda pulled the whole thing together to me. Good job.

AnthoNYC - ToNY chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
i like it so far the way you describe his thoughts and make the character unique with a nervous habit and past. xPP i'd say add a tiny tiny bit more suspense and edit second paragraph a little xx thats just me soo... idk lol maybe describe a tiny bit more too about what he did? like the setting, his actions like u could say the tears were warm streaking down his cheeks and onto ... and such xDD