Reviews for Astronomy
dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 1/17/2009
Haha, interesting concept. It's pretty humorous, especially with the biting sarcasm of the last line (at least the way I read it), but it also has a chilling feel once you really start to think about it.

I wasn't sure if the first line was an author's note or part of the piece. Either way, I don'tn think it's necessary; the poem and the summary can carry the meaning alone.

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Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 6/21/2008
a google of stars,

less than one mind's connections :—

one&all are 1.

insignificant :—

that's the figure to the right

of infinity

quantum states display

an affinity for chance

with their coloured charm

20 billion years

have elapsed from that first start

yet we fate defy

mid-sized yellow sun

blue planet with carbon life

from an older mass
Xerophyte chapter 1 . 2/11/2007
...and don't we feel insignificant now...

hah, I really like the humor and simplicity of this. Yay. Good job!

Sir Scott chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
Someday humanity will enter the unknown galaxies and we enter them as their conqueror.

strawberry memories chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
i simply love this. you give the general public a wake-up smack with just a few simple words.

i. love. it.
writing-to-save-my-soul chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
this is really great. it's funny, but almost bittersweet. and it's short. :D keep writing. [review back?]
Smoky Bear chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
i agree but there's something wrong when your summary and author's note are better than your poem. you should rewrite this and incorporate some of the omitted truths. it would make for a much better piece.