|Reviews for Astronomy|
| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 1/17/2009
Haha, interesting concept. It's pretty humorous, especially with the biting sarcasm of the last line (at least the way I read it), but it also has a chilling feel once you really start to think about it.
I wasn't sure if the first line was an author's note or part of the piece. Either way, I don'tn think it's necessary; the poem and the summary can carry the meaning alone.
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| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 6/21/2008
a google of stars,
less than one mind's connections :—
one&all are 1.
that's the figure to the right
quantum states display
an affinity for chance
with their coloured charm
20 billion years
have elapsed from that first start
yet we fate defy
mid-sized yellow sun
blue planet with carbon life
from an older mass
| Xerophyte chapter 1 . 2/11/2007
...and don't we feel insignificant now...
hah, I really like the humor and simplicity of this. Yay. Good job!
| SirScott chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
Someday humanity will enter the unknown galaxies and we enter them as their conqueror.
| strawberry memories chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
i simply love this. you give the general public a wake-up smack with just a few simple words.
i. love. it.
| writing-to-save-my-soul chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
this is really great. it's funny, but almost bittersweet. and it's short. :D keep writing. [review back?]
| Smoky Bear chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
i agree but there's something wrong when your summary and author's note are better than your poem. you should rewrite this and incorporate some of the omitted truths. it would make for a much better piece.