callmebelle chapter 1 . 2/7/2007
I LOVE the title...

I think you went a little overboard with the rhyming in some cases. In my opinion, rhyming works best when it's used only twice per type of word, not four times. But, the poem was bitersweet enough to work.

The only line I had a problem with was "warmth dose." It sounded forced to get a rhyme.

Keep up the good work!