the format works really well, i particulary love the 'don’tletthemmakeyousane' line. the ending is so sudden & unexpected, & comes like a slap in the face, nice work. Bex xx

pretty good, the format reflects the content which is good. The brackets around 'iron' are particularly effective in the context they have been used. The line "Don’tletthemmakeyousane." is my favorite, it speaks volumes of sub-consious psychology. not too sure i understand the last line though.