Holy flipping cheese its! This story is amazing!

The characters are well thought of and are like actual people.

Great job!

I am glad Jenna finally got over this bumb in the road. i just wonder what Peters immediante reaction will be. He seems pretty worked up about all this. So will he be anger? Estatic? Just happy? Sad that she didn't talk to him about any of her worries?

Update SOON! I can't wait for the next chapter!

~Mo~

PETER NO. Well he really acted like a girl dude. Jebesus, Is Jenna really that crazy, or does she have commitment issues?

ahh i wonder when jenna will tell peter the whole truth.

hahahaha. this story always gets me in a great mood!

uhm. i don't really have a lot to say about this chapter...

except it was short.

AW and yes none can leave a skink... UPDTAE!

fantastic story.

Though it is often difficult for a critic to express themselves neutrally when a story contains values to which they can relate, I believe I may do quite well in the matter.

THIS ONE OF THE ALL TIME BEST ROMANCES! I LOVE IT! UPDATE SOON!

Two words sistah...

"PRODUCT" "ENDORSEMENT"

Do you realize how mcuh potential just this one segment has?

This is a GOLDMINE here!

Paint brands, interior design agencies, taxi services,digital cameras...

I mean COME ON!

Hang writing for pleasure and spiritual fulfillment! Take this to the next level, milk it for all it's worth! Don't let this oppurtunity slip by! Embrace the cold, heartless capitalist side of yourself, I know it's there sistah, I just know it!

Please feel free to E-mail for any tips, if you e-mail w/in the next 24 hours you could get an hours consultation for FREE!

(And what's up with this guy, he has a fashionable, brand name aware chick and he throws her away for "THAT"? come ON let's get real!)

Luv ya sistah! BYE NOW!

Darla-Linette "Fiesta" Indahaus

though the message and underlying moral of this story seem truly heartfelt, it occurs to the critic's mind that there seems to be a lack of attention to certain vital details.

For example; the waffles.

the critic is fascinated by this aspect of the story and would like to see aome major extrapolation. What are the consistency of the waffles/ does the main charachter taste the love and hard work of her boyfriend in every bite? what kind of chocolate chips were used? has the charachter ever had them before? if so, where, and under what circumstances? Perhaps the waffles were eaten for breakfast at a friend's sleepover, at which a life- canging revelation occured? or perhaps a more abstract sybolism, such as the sweetness of the character's life, could be inferred here.

This author seems to have her writing process under control her, but the critic feels there is much left unsaid.

In summary "give us more waffle!"

Thank you very much, yours sincerely

SOMEONE

nicee.. update soon!

LOL! love itt! update ]

loved it... hopin for another chapter to be up soon D

Love the story! I really like how you decribed the story and the character's feelings. Gonna wait for a sequel if there is one..

~ Janelle