Reviews for Trapped |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, I like second person work. It's interesting and very rarely done. And very rarely done well but I think you're skilled. I enjoy your writing style, it's real and your main character attracts me immediately. I was curious though, is Su short for something? LOL I was thinking about it, and I just cannot come up with ANYthing. xD Anywho! I thoroughly enjoyed the first two chapters; They were catching. |
![]() ![]() ![]() XD I love it. I was was thinking that this was from freaking gundamn wing lmao did I guess right? Because everything about this screamed Duo and Heero (damn its been a while since I read a fanfic for GW I hope spelled Heero's name right) but yeah, like I said I loved it, it was awesome. I wish there was more D: |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it! I hope you continue it soon :D /adds this story to my alert list/ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh. Em. Gee. Oh. Em. Gee. Oh. Em. Gee...? (I hear if you say OMG! three time, you get a cookie; I still haven't gotten said cookie but...whatever. :/) Seriously though, I'm an idiot and totally didn't notice your new, spiffy digs and, um, yeah. I'm totally loving it. I love your writing-I think I've said that before but, I'll rephrase it: I love your writing like I love chocolate, which is a lot, and your style is your own here and, oh my God. Can I just say that you combine some of my writing kinks: style and squicky subject-ie: slash-and I seriously love you for it right now. (x 3 because FP keeps eating 'em :/). "He knows the rules of the game. He knows, and he exploits them mercilessly. He pushes to the very edge and maybe a little more before drawing back and flashing that brilliant smile of his. It’s almost cruel at times- his teasing; a touch here, a caress there, and you’re completely trapped. You know, and you can’t do anything about it. You’ve already fallen for him completely, and you’re disgusted by the plaintive expression you know you have on when he’s with flirting those around him. The sickly feeling in the pit of your stomach is always there when you see him sneaking out in the middle of the night while the rest are sleeping. And it gets worse when you see him sneaking back in, smelling of alcohol and cigarettes and swaying to his own beat. You hate him sometimes. But you always hate yourself more for not stopping him from leaving." - Yeah, I had to qoute the whole damn thing. I just adore it THAT MUCH. Best opening paragraph, best introduction to a character-or should I say "characters"?-that I have read in ever. How can you do that? (Twist my heart and make me want to...evil things-ie: write-and stuff.) I love this like I love all your writing, immensly. [ authorl alert] [ fav] Would you mind terribly if I added all your stuff to my C2? I mean...It just embodies the point I made it and, oh. LoveloveloveLOVE it. Love it. - noelle (poetic abortion, as beauty dies) |
![]() ![]() ![]() How can he get ... "untrapped"? |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was so beautiful, and so sad. Aww. I love the way you write this. Still hoping there's more. ] |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love how this starts! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is great, and the style you have of referring to the reader as you is so amazingly fresh. This is great. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it, I like it a lot. You have an amazing style. Is there more? |