|Reviews for French|
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 2/15/2007
I'm unsure about your capitalisation. It feels off throughout, like there was no sort of decisions behind it. Perhaps keep it traditional?
Also, I'd think about scrapping the "and" in the last line to replace it with something a little more interesting or nothing at all. It's just too boring a word to keep in such a short poem, where each word should count.
Otherwise, you've got a good idea and some cute language. Nice work.