Reviews for Fear
Maverick Grey chapter 1 . 2/15/2007
I really enjoyed this! I love it. Bravisimo!

Cheers,

Maverick
The Breakdancing Ninja chapter 1 . 2/15/2007
The format is a little distracting. I think to have that more choking, suffocating feeling it would be more emotive if the words were somehow cramped together in a narrow space-like a long corridor going straight down the page.

I enjoy the symmetry, but it doesn't seem to match the poem-no, now I understand what is so distracting. It's the last set of phrases: "While he tries to/Find his way/Out with/Fear." I understand you are trying to go full circle, but the poem is imbalanced. It spends more time on the girl, and the addition of the lover himself breaks away from the artfulness of a limited perspective and tells us a fact that has no bearing: finding his way out of where?

The poem seems to focus on the girl's emotions, her anxiety, her everything-and then BAM. The guy's perspective just pops out of nowhere.

It's distracting!
Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 2/15/2007
Very good , I liked the first 3 lines .. Keep it Up!
Infinite Smiles chapter 1 . 2/15/2007
Love the format. Well done.