I really like the first chapter!

I can't wait to see what you do with the rest of the story!

I like it!

Good storyline, can't wait to see the plot unfold. Sarcasm is amusing and I'm becoming rather attached to your characters. ]

p.s. You should let anonymous readers review, that way you would receive more feedback for your story. Can't wait for your update!

Haha, snooping around someone's bedroom. Hey, I'd do that too. I can get very curious. :)

[Wes was over six feet tall, sporting a toned, muscular build. He had brown-black hair, an angular jaw, and eyes of sharp blue.]

Hmm, just a little suggestion here. Maybe you could blend Wes's descriptions with his actions, you know? Instead of blurting out with his physicsal descriptions in just one sentence, make you could make it like this:

[He raised a dark eyebrow (you know he has dark hair from this) and walked over to me, his tall frame (you would probably understand he's six foot something here) striding over to me.]

something like that. :P

[He flipped his body over, and cracked an eye open. “Get a clue, sweetheart, and go home.”] Oh! I loved that line! :D

Please update this story. It's a really refreshing read. :)

-abitterkiss (Reviewers found)

ooh please do continue i love these plot line they are my favorite hury

nice

keep writing...

this seems like a very promising story. update as soon as you can!

I enjoyed this. Keep up the good work.