Reviews for Rain
MirrorMirrorOnTheWall chapter 1 . 2/21/2007
This is one of my favorite pieces. i love it. it tells the darker side of the world, the one that alot of people refuse to see. i think its amazing. Along with your new one, judging the world. I now alot of people that act like that. Sometimes i MYSELF look like that. We can all do something to help the world in my opinion. Oh, and thank you for reviewing me earlier! I am glad that you like them, really, it helps me write more.
P.H. Wise chapter 1 . 2/19/2007
This poem needs more evocative imagery. You've committed the sin of telling when you should be showing. This is poetry. *Show* me what you mean.

Here's an exercise you can try: try to describe a rainstorm with such imagery as to evoke the *idea* of nature itself grieving over the world without ever, ever saying something like 'the heavens are bawling.'
Which Mistake am I chapter 1 . 2/16/2007
what can i even say to describe it? because simply beautiful dosn't even begin to cover it!wow
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 2/16/2007
Well written. I like this a lot! :) Write on.

Anna _