I love mac and cheese! 3

IS IT HER MATE!?
dang I forgot his name :P

aside from a bunch of grammar errors, this is awesome! 3 I love it!

*insert weird spazzy noise hear*

I have agitation now... O.o
lol I'm kinda a nerd :P

so how old is she? and this is really good(: aside from a few grammar issues

I'm not going to read past the first chapter. Not only is it a rip off of one of the worst books ever written (Twilight), it's even worse.

What?

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This story is one of the worst story i have ever read since i joined fp... I cant even go futher than this, its very hard to read this excessively boring story with no real plot. There a lot of things i have to complain about but i dont waste my time on lost causes... I am sorry if this annoys you but thats the truth

This chapter was weird for me. I've actually been the new kid from Alaska...

Honestly, its a great story. Though I think the ending needs changing and I think you should keep the pregnancy thing. If the mother realises that her Heaven and Thunder were always meant to be... then she and her husband could get rid of the ones that want their daughter dead, and then Thunder and Heaven could rule...that way heaven can still keep the baby and you can make a sequel

Honestly this was horrible. It's a missmash of ideas and none of them are fully developed. I hate the Sorrin, Sun, Thor thing because it is ridiculous and the so called curse has no real negative effects; they don't kill humans or lose control of themselves. And if they are werewolves why is it that they can turn into wolves whenever they want? Moss and Thunder should not have been able to do that let alone the inexperienced What's her name. Which leads me toy next point the heroine was completely forgettable and I expect I'll forget about Thunder by the end of the day. You dropped the ball with her adoptive parents and her real father. The thing with Tyr made no sense at all where did all the hatred come from? The drama between Thunder and his parents was unnecessary and

came in too late to make any sense at all. If you had stuck with the hand of wolves and Moon as her biological father, kept the mating with Thunder and what's her name, thrown in more drama with her adoptive parents and Moon and gone into more detail in general this would be a much better story. I think that you should remove it and then do an serious over haul with it, because as it is this story is horrendous.

Honestly this was horrible. It's a missmash of ideas and none of them are fully developed. I hate the Sorrin, Sun, Thor thing because it is ridiculous and the so called curse has no real negative effects; they don't kill humans or lose control of themselves. And if they are werewolves why is it that they can turn into wolves whenever they want? Moss and Thunder should not have been able to do that let alone the inexperienced What's her name. Which leads me toy next point the heroine was completely forgettable and I expect I'll forget about Thunder by the end of the day. You dropped the ball with her adoptive parents and her real father. The thing with Tyr made no sense at all where did all the hatred come from? The drama between Thunder and his parents was unnecessary and

came in too late to make any sense at all. If you had stuck with the hand of wolves and Moon as her biological father, kept the mating with Thunder and what's her name, thrown in more drama with her adoptive parents and Moon and gone into more detail in general this would be a much better story. I think that you should remove it and then do an serious over haul with it, because as it is this story is horrendous.

Similar to twilight. just replaced the vamps with werewolves..

Girl moves to new town. immediately befriends a girl named daisy (similar to bella meeting jessica) and etc.