|Reviews for An IT girl type story,Cleopatra used to own it all|
| TheVoiceOfTheTruth chapter 1 . 8/21/2014
I didn't like it. Too many mistakes. I only clicked the link becuase I'm obessesed with Cleopatra. And Cleopatra Philopator wasn't African, she was Greek.
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| LyricsArePoetry chapter 1 . 3/7/2008
Sometimes I think the popular people need to learn what it's like not to be popular!
I hopw you write more, you write really well!
| Vancelle chapter 1 . 4/14/2007
I didn't like it all that much.
You tell the reader instead of showing. Instead of simply saying that people were jealous, SHOW that people were jealous. Also, you don't need those brackets.
There are a few grammatical errors, like 'their' instead of 'there'.
The idea itself is rather cliche. I suggest you scrap it all together. But if you want to continue writing it, go right ahead, yet be sure to severely edit it before you do.
| MyInspiration chapter 1 . 2/17/2007
You write so well. I read this and for me at least, the ofcus wasn't on the story (though interesting it may be) but on the wrting. I especially liked the second paragrpah and the beginning of the third. Please continue.