that really stinks, it was a wonderful story. I just loved the whole concept, it made you realize the true brutality of the world and I am extrenely sad to see such a great story pulled away from where other writers can read it and enjoy the wonders of your writing

This is out of the blue, but...

Would you beta my new story Spilt Blood?

I saw this ending comming. It makes me sad, but I respect you for it. :D

A truly well-written peice. The cruel injustice of the world is never kind to those different. Some people dont care enough to consider how it might effect other for even a second before doing something as awful as killing another human being. This piece, i believe, shows the true world,not the world in which everything ends perfectly depicted in many other stories.

I honestly cannot give you any advice to make the story any better, it's already perfect as it is. Dont ever change it, no matter how many flames you get from jealous people.

Until Next Time

Beautifully written and perfectly sad. Usually i'm against sad endings but this felt...right almost. very well written and Congratualtions on finishing it. Its wonderful

Kat.

You have the women’s head spinning. You used the plural form of woman. It should be woman's.

Sad ending.

I almost cried.

~Twilight Starr~

It is so sad!

~Twilight Starr~

Cute flashback.

The mom and the sister are very cruel people.

~Twilight Starr~

Uh-oh. She was caught.

At least she found a use to help people with her ability.

~Twilight Starr~

Wonderful chapter.

It's very sweet. :)

~Twilight Starr~

Another cute, lovely chapter.

I like the wedding scene.

~Twilight Starr~

Cute chapter.

It made me smile. :)

~Twilight Starr~

I like Vevina.

This chapter explains a lot.

~Twilight Starr~

Interesting chapter.

~Twilight Starr~

He really loves her. :)

~Twilight Starr~