Reviews for You Wonder Why
TaltushMeiMei chapter 1 . 2/19/2007
While I do admire what you've tried to do here, the rhyming is a tad bit forced. I know you're trying to have it all rhyme, but having four lines all end with the same sound ultimately results in a rather tight poem. You've actually done surprisingly well, but it could have been infinitely better had it been 2 and 2 rather than 1. It's not bad like this, but it could be better, I think. I think the topic is a nice one, so really it's only the rhyming sequence that is troubling me.
Not Quite Dry Eyed chapter 1 . 2/19/2007
I understand what you are saying here. You are always ready and expecting to have to fight someone so you can't get what you really want out of life. I understand that all too well. Great job on this poem! Keep writing forever and always. Please R&R me sometime.

Not Quite Dry Eyed