|Reviews for africa|
| tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
This is so heartbreaking! I really love your style of writing, everything is just so beautiful and everything is natural and flowing.
Great description of the children.
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 3/11/2007
God, this is so tragic. The end of this is just heartbreaking. I like the descriptions in this, but the 3rd stanza has a misplaced modifier ("swollen with hunger" should be directly after "bellies," otherwise it looks as if the burnt wood is the thing swollen with hunger). I'm not sure how I feel about the "feet that hurt from walking on glass" bit, either. Regardless, this is sad and breaks my heart. I just started a C2 for image-filled poetry & prose & I'm going to put this in as my first piece! Keep writing! :)