|Reviews for Who's Ashley?|
| ViciousDear chapter 1 . 6/27/2007
It makes me wonder if he's serious about the "who's Ashley" thing or just a guy. It makes me want more.
| On Eagle's Wings chapter 1 . 2/22/2007
Well, the idea is good, and the second half is pretty well done. But the exposition is really slow and is classic "telling, not showing." Using half of your story to tell how the main character is exactly opposite of her best friend and all the activities in her life etc. isn't really necessary. You could develop those ideas much better by extending the dialogue between them and using that to show how she thought he was cheating on her with all those girls.