|Reviews for Lightest Touch|
| CrazyTurtles chapter 1 . 2/23/2007
Aww pretty! I love stuff about the moon. Great job.
| Which Mistake am I chapter 1 . 2/23/2007
I really like this. It all seems to flow very nicely. )
| Follower of the Jorio chapter 1 . 2/23/2007
I like how this gives the illusion of the sun until the very end. This whole poem has a simple, subtle feel which makes for a very nice effect. Good job!
| Counting Petals chapter 1 . 2/23/2007
It was good, except there were a couple parallelism issues that stood out:
"I hide under my covers
and peeked out of them."
You should make it "hid" so it goes with the second line of the stanza.
"Dashing out of my sleeping place
and run towards the door."
"Running" would work better here, because it's a parallel action with "dashing". It sounds a lot better and it's more grammatically correct.
Other than that, great work! I love the imagery!
| a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 2/22/2007
I love the imagery and the way this is written. Quite nice :)