Reviews for Games
PerpetualBliss44 chapter 1 . 2/27/2007
I like the poem, and the feelings you're trying to get across. I think that in some places things could have been worded differently, or perhaps the lines could have been broken up differently. But all in all, I thought you put a lot of emotion into it, and I could connect, which is always nice. Good job.
greype-juice chapter 1 . 2/23/2007
The beginning of your poem is great, nice repetition, a good balance of short lines with the interrupting longer one. Near the end of the poem though, the repetition dwindles or seems a bit more forced. The ending is nice, "And it really makes me sick of myself/when someone else/is sick of me too" (though notice that the lines are no longer short with the the interrupting long line, they're beginning to all become medium in size). It kind of reminds me of the sonnet at the end of the movie Ten Things I Hate About You (if you have seen that movie). Nice job though, nice poem.