Are you trying to punish all of us? I really want to know what is going to happen next? Persy and bren are finally together- well sort of... Please update soon i want to know and i think everyone else does as well...

hey luved the story so far, wishes and desirers told me 2 read it and i cant wait 4 the next update. carry on the gr8 work!

i love this story, where it's going, the characters, just about everything! and timely updates are always amazing!

although, i think u meant virginal sister? prolly, N E WAY!

update soon!

This chapter was GREAT i really loved it! I'm glad Persy and Paris got together in the end!

brennan's my favorite character! haven't figured out my least favorite yet. clair's pov was ok,not what i really want to read very often. their cute together! bren's counting thing whats it called? i think i may have a slight case because i always count the sides of my fingernails and i'll occasionaly start counting objects or things on the side of the road with out even thinking about it,do u think i might have a slight case? and what kind of learning disability do u have? if u don't mind me asking cause i have dislexia and i used to try to never have to read but now thats pretty much all i do so i have slight trouble reading sometimes which just sucks!

that was really good, i liked it. please update soon!

Love your story. Don't stop. But... euh... why is Brennan always calling her Stephanie, cause it's not close in anyway to Persephone. Thx

ok I have to say that I have been sitting in front of my computer for about an hour trying to find a story even worth reading. So I have to thank you and give great credit to you..I LOVE THIS STORY! it is just awsome and takes my breath away. I actually can some times think i feel what she is going through..though brenn sounds like he is super hot and ah something that you would want underneath your x-mas tree..omg cant believe i just said that..anyways...keep up the great writing and i cant wait to read more..your new fan

Hey. Nice Story, some misspelled words, but i have no room to talk. update soon! i've been banned from books, but i don't think my parental units have realized there is stuff to read on the computer too! Gasp Modern technology foils old people again. I like senor grumpy (my pet name for your boy Brennan) he's cool.

Question1: How do pronounce Percy's full name, i'm confused. It's one o those name that'll be mispronounced twenty times before someone gets it right.

Question2: Your from...? Obviously not from anywhere near here (meaning Nebraska {USA}. No one's near here... and if they are it's by accident!) I would say Europe or Canada? You've probably mentioned it somewhere, but being the space cadet i am, I missed it.

I'll save the rest of my questions for later.

Adios,

Belle

OH MY GOSH! THIS CHAPTER WAS AMAZING! ABSOLUTELY AMAZING! I LOVED IT!

Paris and Shirley were so cute, but I LOVED how Brennan and Persy FINALLY got together. AAH! YESH! GREAT JOB!

I LOVED THE CHAPTER! I can't wait to read more!

I want 2 ask does Persy imagine having sex with Brennan or does it actually happen? This chapter is really good, i really can't wait read the rest and find out what happens and all. Thanks 4 review my story. Things are beginning to move a lot more forward and i think it's going to get more exciting and a lot more fun. Can't wait!

I am bad. I know. I am bad. I haven't reviewed. Truthfully, just today I have finished reading all the chaps you've uploaded since my last time...

I don't know if FP will even allow it, seeing as how it tells me I cannot upload my chapters- yet- people seem to be updating without a problem. grr.

Wonderful stuff. I'm glad I had a cluster of chapters to read at once, though now... I want more.

I really love your sense of humor in this story. It's been awhile since I sat down and read a story from start to finish like this. Wonderful, wonderful, and I love it :D

Now for the criticism:

It's pretty apparent that you have a good sized vocabulary and a grasp of basic English conventions. That's why I deduce it's pure laziness that creates the spelling mistakes in your story. Run a spell check at the very least. I know a lot of authors who can't read their work right after they've written it. Maybe it's a good idea if you let your chapters sit for a few days before revisiting them. I really love your story, but the grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors just take away from the whole effect.

ok i'm confused they did have sex in the classroom right? why does brennan need revenge on clair? so the end of this was him pretty much telling her that he wanted her and only her and her accepting? when did paris and shirley start dating? this one was good!

My only complaint is that you keep switching from first to third person. I suppose this can be workable if you did it every other paragraph, but sometimes, you do it right in the middle of the a sentence. It's very distracting and takes away from this awesome story.