|Reviews for The Folly|
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 3/4/2007
Interesting piece. I love the alliteration in the middle of this - really helps to solidify the poetic aspect of this, as does the repetition of ideas. I think the word "exanguinatingly" is a bit much, because it's a hard enough word to say as it is, and if you'd ever want to read this aloud, it might make things difficult. I love the last line, though. Fantastic. Keep writing! :)
| In the Rye chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
Your imagery is very vivid.
| HHHHHHH chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
Written well, and with good style, but incomprehensible to me. It would be nice to have more to go on, but it's not like you're the only one-everyone, including me, seems to write poems with thoughts in them but no lucid subject. Anyway. If you want to read the stuff of someone with an outstanding command of technique, check me out. I don't have my head on straight yet, but I know a damn lot of English.